The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by astralian teenegers from 1975 to 2000.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparations where relevant.

As the line graph depicts, there are three categories of fast foods which are consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 until 2000. At a glance, Fish and Chips experienced a fluctuation trend, however Pizza and Hamburgers encountered an inclination through over 25 years.

In the year 1975, Fish and Chips stood at the highest amount of consumption compared to Pizza and Hamburgers, started at 100 and fluctuated to approximately 90 in 1985 and then decreased steadily to around 39 in 2000. Hamburgers, however, had a gradual inclination at around 10 in 1975 and came across to the same point of Fish and Chips in 1985, and then continued to have moderate increasing to above 100 in the year 2000. Similarly, Pizza had the same trend with Hamburgers, but with a longer period, rose at 8 in 1975 to around 85 in 1995. Afterwards, no change in Pizza consumption could be observed from 1995 to 2000.

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Category: Good Excellent
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No. of Words: 155 200
No. of Characters: 724 1000
No. of Different Words: 88 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.528 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.671 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.764 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 42 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 33 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 26 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.503 0.35
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Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.164 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 4