Police Visibility - Smithville changes in procedures, more funds, more officers, patrol on foot not cars, expected to lower crime rate.
The author of the above passage makes a very bold claim, stating that the measures he states are bound to reduce the crime rate in the cities and make the citizens feel safer. The mentioned steps are simply generic methods to increase the visibility of the police force, and the author presents absolutely no evidence to back the fact that they may lead to significant reduction in criminal activities. There are several gaps in the arguements that need to filled with concrete evidence to back the conclusion made.
Firstly, the author makes an inherent assumption of the fact that police visibility is bound to increase with an increase in the number of officers. This is not necessarily true because there is no evidence to back the same. In fact depending upon the type of officers hired, the number of visible or patrol officers may not even change because most of the newly hired officers may have a desk job.
Furthermore, the author states that allocating more funds to the police for overtime will significantly improve the situation without stating the the rationale behind such a move. Some statistical and financial evidence stating that allocating more budgets to overtime of the task force leads to a secure society would significantly strengthen the author's arguement. With no such proof, the author does not even fully provide an insight into whether less funds are actually the issue or not. The current budget and it's use on the same aspect is not stated. Moreover, working overtime may even have an adverse effect on the current and newly employed police officers and may even lead to lessening in the productivity in general.
Patroling on foot rather than on patrol cars is considered by the author as another contributing factor to lessening the crime rate of Smithville. With no insight into the type and nature of crimes, assuming that police officers are more visible and active on foot is wrong. It could be that the current situation may have a significantly high number of car thefts or high speed chases, making police on foot a step behind the criminals.
The author does not give insight into what would make the citizens feel safer and have more trust on the police force. He simply assumes that an increase in visibilty will do the trick, whereas the citizens may be concerned about completely different issues of the police - like the lethargic attitude of the officers or simply the lack of skill. A survey of the opinions of the general public would surely have bridged the gap in his arguements and provided concrete backing to the author's claims.
Hence, the author needs more facts and figures to support the bold claims he makes. The public should not blindly believe whatever is written in the above mentioned document as the situation may or may not improve.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 476 350
No. of Characters: 2291 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.671 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.813 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.465 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.747 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...wly hired officers may have a desk job. Furthermore, the author states that allo...
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Line 5, column 143, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...y improve the situation without stating the the rationale behind such a move. Some stat...
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Line 5, column 143, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...y improve the situation without stating the the rationale behind such a move. Some stat...
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Line 5, column 451, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun funds is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...n fully provide an insight into whether less funds are actually the issue or not. Th...
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Line 9, column 380, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... skill. A survey of the opinions of the general public would surely have bridged the gap in hi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, so, then, whereas, in fact, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2339.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 476.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91386554622 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50988315836 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457983193277 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 760.5 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0720261652 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.105263158 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0526315789 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226091544019 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695262592692 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666562377384 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123713098693 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0859462592934 0.0628817314937 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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