Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As countries and cities more and more developed, the appearance of large shopping malls is on the rise and due to factors such as advertising and boredom, youngsters are now spending an overwhelming amount of time in shopping malls where they are aimlessly wasting their money and time. In my view, I believe that this trend negatively influences the youth as well as where they live as a whole.
Firstly, young people use their leisure time in shopping malls would cause bad effect on their physical health and mind. They will be less likely to participate in outdoor activities with their loved ones. This may reduce the amount of time for their social relationships in the long run and may get symptoms of a shopaholic. It is well known that those who spend time outside playing sports or joining in other recreational activities will enjoy a much healthier lifestyle and be less at risk of suffering from a range of common diseases caused by a sedentary lifestyle, such as obesity and diabetes.
Secondly, from societal points of view, as the juniors are interested in going shopping malls rather than focusing on study or work, the community may bear from a decrease in the intellectual level and work productivity. Due to almost all shopping addicts can spend a whole day going around a mall, which reduces the time used in the workplace and school. As a result, there will be less work being done, which causes the economy to suffer. The youths can skip classes and lessons to enjoy going shopping with their friends, making the national quality of education drop significantly.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that the phenomenon that a majority of young teenagers are wasting their precious time in shopping malls has many harmful impacts on both the young and society as a whole.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88235294118 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64233420046 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56862745098 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.4083616084 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.818181818 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8181818182 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1818181818 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281820560964 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101008720395 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779797140207 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170475227628 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551255311962 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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