my family

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my family

Hello, everyone! My name is Nguyễn Văn Dư.I’m 20 years old and i’m from Sóc Trăng.and i’m a student at the Can Tho university. I study veterinary medicine.
I’m glad to introduce my family. As a traditional family in Vietnam. My family has 6 members, including grandparents, Mom, Dad, one brother and me.
My mom’s name is Loan. She has long hair and black eyes. My Dad’s name is Thừa. He is tall and very strong. My Dad’s and mom’s is farmers. My grandparents are gardeners and housewives. And my brother is Phú. And now he is a student of Long Bình High School.
My Dad's and mom’s spends most of his time in the field behind the house. That’s why they has a tanned skin. They usually finish their work at noon and have lunch with their family at this time. My grandmother and I were responsible for household chores. my grandmother cooks and I clean the house. My grandfather took care of the garden behind the house. We have a small chicken coop behind the house. We don't buy chicken, we raise it bec.ause it's better.
Meals are very important to my family. We chatted and gathered together during the meal and after that. Meals help strengthen family sentiment. That is the conception of my family. After a day, we always spend time together in the evening. chat and discuss family affairs. We have almost no separation. a happy family. People are always caring and loving each other.
Wherever I go, though far away, I always remember my family. A place for me to feel warm, a place full of love. I love my family.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...llo, everyone! My name is Nguyễn Văn Dư.I’m 20 years old and i’m from Sóc Trăng.a...
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Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I’m'?
Suggestion: I’m
...e is Nguyễn Văn Dư.I’m 20 years old and i’m from Sóc Trăng.and i’m a student at the...
^^^
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I’m'?
Suggestion: I’m
...20 years old and i’m from Sóc Trăng.and i’m a student at the Can Tho university. I ...
^^^
Line 2, column 2, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...versity. I study veterinary medicine. I’m glad to introduce my family. As a tra...
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Line 2, column 34, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ine. I’m glad to introduce my family. As a traditional family in Vietnam. My fam...
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Line 4, column 90, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...field behind the house. That’s why they has a tanned skin. They usually finish thei...
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Line 4, column 255, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: My
... were responsible for household chores. my grandmother cooks and I clean the house...
^^
Line 4, column 406, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...small chicken coop behind the house. We dont buy chicken, we raise it bec.ause its b...
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Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Chat
...ays spend time together in the evening. chat and discuss family affairs. We have alm...
^^^^
Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: A
... affairs. We have almost no separation. a happy family. People are always caring ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 5.05154639175 337% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 32.9175257732 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1280.0 937.175257732 137% => OK
No of words: 277.0 206.0 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62093862816 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54885918237 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 127.690721649 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57761732852 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 379.8 290.88556701 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 26.0 9.13402061856 285% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 12.6804123711 260% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 8.0 16.3608247423 49% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.4151654372 44.8134815571 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 38.7878787879 76.5299724578 51% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 8.39393939394 16.8248392259 50% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 0.121212121212 4.34317383033 3% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 20.0 3.94845360825 507% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470499659361 0.216113520407 218% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123579625 0.0766984524023 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109276901153 0.0603063233224 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251238481099 0.12726935374 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122498695891 0.0580467560999 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 4.5 8.37731958763 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.28 70.7449484536 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.1 7.45979381443 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.44 8.71597938144 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.37 7.59969072165 84% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 3.0 8.62886597938 35% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 5.2 8.54432989691 61% => OK
text_standard: 5.0 8.15463917526 61% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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