The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Family means having someone to love you unconditionally in spite of you and your shortcomings. Family is loving and supporting one another even when it's not easy to do so. It's being the best person you could be so that you may inspire your loved ones. But in this new era, extended family members like grandparents, cousins, uncles, or aunts are less important in contrast with the past. I have three main rationales for holding this opinion and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, the connection between family members is declining because we are diligently working to earn a lot of money. The attitudes of each family are in constant change. For instance, We moved to the USA two years back for higher social status and better living. Our family is away from all our relatives and parents, which is heart-breaking. We denied our extended family members for our personal well-being. But we are in regular contact with our family so that we will not miss them. Technological development is a boon to everyone's life like social media and the internet.
Next, parents pay a lot of attention to their child's education now than the past. This is also a motivational factor for the migration of families to more nuclear ones. Earlier, people never paid attention to their children especially if it is a girl. Higher education was denied to ladies because they should be taught to become a good homemaker. On the contrary, equality in education came to being and it leads women to persuade their dreams. This driving factor paved the way to migrate to urban areas where education and transportation facilities are easily accessible. My uncle's family is ample proof of this. They immigrated from their small village to a metropolitan city to endorse their children's education. Now they had little contact with other members of our family and they refused to come back to the village as they got addicted to the facilities in the city.
Finally, the relatives and grandparents can support us during our arduous times like demise, financial crisis, unemployment, etc.. If we live in a small nuclear home, we cannot understand their care and support. For instance, during my delivery time, my grandmom stayed and take cared for the baby and myself. But, she returned to her family after 3 months. Albeit we know the deep connection between family members, we discredit this bond and tries to live alone.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that there is a decrease in the tie between family members even if we know the benefits a family relation. It is because our minds are searching for heights. As a result, the anticipated outcomes of fewer family relations will surge in the near future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...addicted to the facilities in the city. Finally, the relatives and grandparents ...
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Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...ise, financial crisis, unemployment, etc.. If we live in a small nuclear home, we ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all, in spite of, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2267.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89632829374 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70873849789 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550755939525 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.0793423164 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.1724137931 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9655172414 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93103448276 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190179225938 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466323694352 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591326436485 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0919129070339 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310352598036 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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