The following appeared in a memo at XYZ company.
"When XYZ lays off employees, it pays Delany Personnel Firm to offer those employees assistance in creating résumés and developing interviewing skills, if they so desire. Laid-off employees have benefited greatly from Delany's services: last year those who used Delany found jobs much more quickly than did those who did not. Recently, it has been proposed that we use the less expensive Walsh Personnel Firm in place of Delany. This would be a mistake because eight years ago, when XYZ was using Walsh, only half of the workers we laid off at that time found jobs within a year. Moreover, Delany is clearly superior, as evidenced by its bigger staff and larger number of branch offices. After all, last year Delany's clients took an average of six months to find jobs, whereas Walsh's clients took nine."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
According to the author of the memo, the company should not use Walsh Personnel Firm in place of Delany. The argument may seem plausible at first glance. However, in order to evaluate the soundness of the argument, we need more information regarding the reason why employees receiving help from Delany get jobs more quickly, the reason why people working with Walsh is hard to find a job eight years ago, and the effect of staff size and branch network on the quality of the service.
To begin with, more direct evidence with regard to the reason why people who used Delany find jobs quickly is required, so as to verify the argument. In accordance with the author, this could be attributed to the effectiveness of Delany 's service. But it is possible that those who used Delany are more competent than those who don't. For example, maybe they have better communication skills or excellent professional knowledge. If this is the case, they can get a rewarding and promising job more quickly than others, even if they did not receive Delany 's services. Consequently, without more information about the laid-off employees to justify that Delany's services really make a difference, the argument is untenable.
In addition, we also need to know more about the reason why those working with Walsh can not get a job easily eight years ago. The fact that only half of the workers found jobs within a year eight years ago doesn't necessarily imply that Walsh is less likely to help people find a job now. Maybe in the past, the local economy was doing poorly, and thus it is difficult for everyone to locate a position. Or perhaps, Walsh's clients at that time were from the industries where jobs are difficult to find. If any of the aforementioned conditions is the case, it is unsafe to conclude that Walsh's services are not as effective as Delany. Obviously, we need more evidence to rule out these possibilities before we could accept the argument.
Finally, another crucial piece of evidence we need is about the effect of staff and branch numbers on the quality of the services. The author implies that bigger staff and a larger number of branch offices could contribute to better services. But it is likely that the efficiency of these employees is comparatively low. If so, Delany may not superior to Walsh. We also need to know whether staff in Delany could get more information with the help of other colleagues or branch offices. If they can't, they are less likely to provide a better service. Hence, we should collect more evidence apropos of the working condition in Delany in order to assess the argument.
In conclusion, it is understandable that the author would like to provide their laid-off employees with better care. But we can not conclude that Delany's services are better than Walsh's with limited information. Only when the author could provide more evidence mentioned above can the argument be confirmed valid.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 500 350
No. of Characters: 2380 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.729 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.76 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.53 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.741 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.708 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.488 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... help from Delany get jobs more quickly, the reason why people working with Walsh...
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Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...d Delany find jobs quickly is required, so as to verify the argument. In accordance with...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...elany are more competent than those who dont. For example, maybe they have better co...
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Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ound jobs within a year eight years ago doesnt necessarily imply that Walsh is less li...
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Line 7, column 496, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...r colleagues or branch offices. If they cant, they are less likely to provide a bett...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, really, regarding, so, thus, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2438.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 500.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.876 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59507225333 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 777.6 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6465041574 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.52 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128847054105 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445042637473 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446879222012 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0854519011975 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437654241486 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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