The following appeared in a memo at XYZ company
"When XYZ lays off employees, it pays Delany Personnel Firm to offer those employees assistance in creating résumés and developing interviewing skills, if they so desire. Laid-off employees have benefited greatly from Delany's services: last year those who used Delany found jobs much more quickly than did those who did not. Recently, it has been proposed that we use the less expensive Walsh Personnel Firm in place of Delany. This would be a mistake because eight years ago, when XYZ was using Walsh, only half of the workers we laid off at that time found jobs within a year. Moreover, Delany is clearly superior, as evidenced by its bigger staff and larger number of branch offices. After all, last year Delany's clients took an average of six months to find jobs, whereas Walsh's clients took nine."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument was appeared in a memo of XYZ company. The argument argues that Delany Personnel Firm is superior than Walsh Personnel Firm. The author mentions that those who used Delany found jobs much more quickly than did those who did not. He mentions last year’s data and scenario of before eight year. Although the evidences presented in the argument is true, he is too quick to assume that Delany firm is superior by seeing the past results; he failed to analyze the specific details about present scenarios and future aspect so the conclusion presented in the argument is dubious. The specific evidences which are needed to evaluate the argument are presented in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the author assumes that Delany Personal Firm always do better to assist the job seekers. This assumption is too general because he failed to analyze the specific details about the future scenario and market. So the conclusion presented in the argument is dubious. For example, while the result of Delany firm’s result was good in the past, there may be improved environment of Walsh. So before arguing, the author need to analyze the new environment, new policy and strategy of another firm as well.
In addition, The author need to analyze the number of jobs available in the market before to come into the conclusion. He assumes that number of job available will be high so that the employee will get job who used the Delany firm for assistance. This assumption is groundless because he failed to analyze the thorough research of job aspects in future. So the conclusion made with out the thorough study is questionable. For example, the number of job recommended by the Delany would decrease in the near future and the job recommended by Walsh would increase; so before making the conclusion author needs to foresee the future scenario.
Furthermore, the author must analyze the actual time taken to get job by job seekers who take assistance from Delany Personal Firm. He assumes that average time is enough to be superior. However, this assumption is unwarranted because he fails to analyze the details data about the time taken to get job. So the conclusion based on this assumption is questionable. For instance, some might get job in two or three years which is very late. Author needs to analyze the detail data analysis before making the conclusion.
In conclusion, the evidences which are presented above is needed to evaluate the argument. If the mentioned evidences is analyzed in the process of evaluation of argument the argument will be strong else the argument will be invalid.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 438 350
No. of Characters: 2126 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.575 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.854 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.504 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.56 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.386 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.16 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
... that Delany Personnel Firm is superior than Walsh Personnel Firm. The author mentio...
^^^^
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... is superior than Walsh Personnel Firm. The author mentions that those who used Del...
^^^
Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ze the thorough research of job aspects in future. So the conclusion made with out the th...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 378, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
...pects in future. So the conclusion made with out the thorough study is questionable. For...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'details'' or 'detail's'?
Suggestion: details'; detail's
...rranted because he fails to analyze the details data about the time taken to get job. S...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 91, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ove is needed to evaluate the argument. If the mentioned evidences is analyzed in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2180.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 438.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97716894977 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60263958792 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.408675799087 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6860571448 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8333333333 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0974667510057 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346817850802 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416342749132 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0564271214176 0.128457276422 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385649509356 0.0628817314937 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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