Your school wants to improve the quality of students' life in the dormitory. Which one of the following do you think the school should build in dorms?
The quiet study area (A quiet place for study)
Exercise room for students to keep physical well-being
Room for entertainment (like watching movies)
It is undeniable that universities' plans for the dormitories have profound effects on the quality of the students' life. The University should do projects that positively affect the studying conditions. In addition, it should be helpful for other aspects of life in society. I think that a good plan can be making an exercise room for students. I feel this due to two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
The first reason worth mentioning is that making an exercise room will encourage students to exercise, very useful to have a healthy life. To be more specific, students who live in dormitories come from a far point of the country. They usually face financial problems. So they prefer not to join sports clubs off-campus. It is obvious that exercises are very significant for having a healthy life. So having an exercise room in the dorm should motivate students to regularly exercise. As my own example, when I joined the university because of some financial problems due to the high amount to tuition, I cannot maintain my sport field, the Caratte, but in my junior year, Our dormitory dedicates a large room to exercise. So I start to exercise Carrate again. Therefore, making a motivation can encourage the students to exercise that it important a lot avoid a wide variety of physical diseases.
Furthermore, making an exercise room will be a good place for students to spend their free time exercising as an entertainment. To elucidate, most of the students after three or four hours studying, become tired and want to walk or do physical activity. But in recent years, the whole of the academic year is faced with air pollution. So students cannot go out of the dorm. So I think that the universities should make an exercise room for students to use as entertainment among their breaks.
In conclusion, I think that providing an exercise room for the dorm is a multi-purpose plan. It not only encourages students to exercise but also should be good entertainment for students in their breaks after they study.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87643678161 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84468680715 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514367816092 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.740420376 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.8095238095 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5714285714 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354872862739 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112189314455 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691104269663 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252918365666 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421076371697 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
It is undeniable that universities plans...
^^^
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... profound effects on the quality of the students life. The University should do projects...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...I will explore in the following essay. The first reason worth mentioning is tha...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d a wide variety of physical diseases. Furthermore, making an exercise room wil...
^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e as entertainment among their breaks. In conclusion, I think that providing an...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87643678161 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84468680715 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514367816092 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.740420376 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.8095238095 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5714285714 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354872862739 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112189314455 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691104269663 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252918365666 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421076371697 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.