Nowadays children are consuming too many sugar based drinks What are the reasons and the solutions for this situation

Several researcher have warned about the risks of assuming sugar based drinks, especially among children. An excessive intake of sugar can lead to severe deseases that can threath the cardiovascular system, like obesity, diabetis or coronary. Some carbonate drinks have been found to have a detrimental effect on the dental and general health of people It is therefore essential to educate children to cut down on foods and beveragse that contain sugar and to opt for low sugar products. Sugar is contained naturally in many vegtables and fruits so that theoretically it would be unnecessary to add it to what we drink or eat.
The mean reason why children and adults as well love drinking soft drinks is essentially due to the fact that sugar creates a strong addiction, like tobacco or alcohol, Furthermore, soft drinks supply energy only and are of little nutritional benefit and lack micro-nutrients, vitamins and minerals.

The spread of obesity among children have raised major concerns in the scientific community over the high levels of sugar contained in some beverages. In the wake of this dangerous habit, medical experts are calling for actions to tackle this threath, like increasing taxation on sugar based drinks or banning them from vendor machines in schools.
Diseases ensued by an exaggerate consumption of sugar represent a serious challenge to our society and can put the healthcare system to its limits. In order to flatten the curve of obesity spread among children, some simple but nevertheless efficient measures can be taken: first of all, alimentation should be taught at school, so that children can become aware of the danger of an unhealthy diet. Secondly, consumption of sugar based drinks and foods should be discouraged through higher taxation, whose revenues can be employed to subsidize the healthcare system and to cure obesity.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21262458472 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80458890418 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607973421927 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.7414674655 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.9 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1 20.7667163134 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265672455683 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102867887778 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530607937555 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159873935336 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492645255992 0.056905535591 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.53 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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