Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country.
Throughout the history, education has played a pivotal role in all societies. Due its paramount importance, government have tried to elevated the effectiveness of schools. The controversial question which arises here what is the most momentous element in successful flourish of a country? Although some people believe that other factor like: family, government and etc are indispensable but I admit that schools has far-reach effect on development of a country. I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two remarkable reasons.
The first aspect to point out is that schools prepares student for future tasks. School is like a small society whit specified roles and a headmaster also educational system act like real word, a person who do his duty better takes reward in contrast who doesn’t work well take lower score or punishment, however such methods teach them how to be responsible in future. Take a personal experience for example. When I went to school our teacher determines assignment based on myriad factors -average of our scores, class activity, helping to other student or janitor- for each student. So we learn if we do our tasks very well and be a supportive we would have more free time at home. Also we know our success don’t depend on just one thing.
Another reason which deserve some words here is that schools boots level of literacy. As the world evolves and creates more and more different and significant situation, the feature makes a person efficient is his knowledge. The vast majority of information and ability have been teaching in school therefore improving school not only treat more lettered person but also make an advanced society in the future. For instance, the result of research underscores the fact that a country has developed schools and educational system is more successful. Besides, the result shows that there are more happiness and satisfaction of life. According to another study, rate of mental and physical health in country with advanced schools is dramatically high.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that improving school have always been a key factor of development. It is hard to disguise the fact that other factors might help the country be successful, but all of the other factor are subset of educational system. Therefore, I believe that the benefits of boosting school doesn’t have any drawbacks. It is highly recommended that government pay a lot more attention to school and think how they can have more efficient educational system
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- TPO 21 Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country 85
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It s better to have rules about the type of clothing that people wear at schools or in their workplace 90
- summarise the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made in reading passage 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is not necessary for university students to attend classes as long as they can pass their examinations 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 359, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ethods teach them how to be responsible in future. Take a personal experience for example...
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Line 2, column 684, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e we would have more free time at home. Also we know our success don’t depend on jus...
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Line 3, column 484, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...arch underscores the fact that a country has developed schools and educational sy...
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Line 4, column 233, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ght help the country be successful, but all of the other factor are subset of educational ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12019230769 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81896036456 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584134615385 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7909239881 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.428571429 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8095238095 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190224417161 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518878780059 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044767258969 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113611803591 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0218876306693 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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