When facing bad circumstances, such as low job satisfaction or the lack of money, some people choose to accept while others will choose to strive to get a better situation. I personally would say that I completely agree with the latter statement.
On the one hand, some people choose to accept bad circumstances that happen to them. This is because they think that by accepting those situations they will be able to learn new life values, such as thankfulness. For instance, an employee faces a condition where he does not get promoted even though he has worked really hard. Rather than complaining, he choose to be thankful of still getting a job. He realizes about how hard getting a job is and a lot of his fellows are still unemployed. This is good because the bad condition has made someone to learn a new life value, but it is not enough because it can't help people to get out from those unwanted situations.
On the other hand, there is a group of people who prefer to strive when facing unwanted circumstances. This group of people believe that by struggling to improve the bad conditions, their situations will change. For an example, an employee in a company experiences a wage shortage. When facing this wage shortage, he tries to learn new skills and avoid his old mistakes so he can improve his work performance. As a result, his wage finally rises because he provides a better work performance.
In conclusion, I believe that accepting bad situation is great because it can teach people a new life value. But, it is better if we strive to improve the situation because it can help us to get out of those unwanted circumstances.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...eally hard. Rather than complaining, he choose to be thankful of still getting a job. ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... value, but it is not enough because it cant help people to get out from those unwan...
^^^^
Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
... value, but it is not enough because it cant help people to get out from those unwan...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, really, so, still, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1362.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71280276817 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78762193942 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508650519031 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.5984528454 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2666666667 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226352465302 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082111978784 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673785127273 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155834013421 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293741448452 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 78.4519038076 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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