As the argument asserts, number of enrollments in Omni university for online programs has increased recently, and their dormitory and class expences decreased subsequently. On the other hand the Humana university faced a reduction in enrolments in last years and the costs of maintaining the buildings is a burden on them. therefore, the president of Humana believes that they should start online programs as well as Omni, in order to attract more students and pay less costs for facilities. I believe that this arguments is flawed from some aspects which would be elaborated in this essay.
First of all, the assumption that starting an online program might be interesting for students is fallacious, Since the market consists of consumers with different tastes, some are mostly into online programs, while the others prefer the opposite. Thus, there would be universities for both these groups. If the Omni pioneered the online courses, it would be more lucrative for Humana to supply other kind of instruction.
Furthermore, although online education is more economical, some people are still opponents of offline education, because real communication may be more efficatious. This tendency might convince the students to pay more for traditional instruction. Also the online courses need an infrastructure which might be as expensive as the building maintainance. So Humana can increase its financial resources by increasing the cost of the programs.
In conclusion, from my personal stand point, the president's assumptions about the increase in number of enrolment and decrease in building expenditures due to the promotion of online programs is not practical, since the competition with Omni in attracting new students might most likely lead to the failure of Huwana, and their overall expences might remain the same considering the costs of designing an online platform for students.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 295 350
No. of Characters: 1565 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.144 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.305 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.881 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.11 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.594 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 324, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ning the buildings is a burden on them. therefore, the president of Humana believes that ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 466, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun costs is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... order to attract more students and pay less costs for facilities. I believe that th...
^^^^
Line 1, column 508, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ss costs for facilities. I believe that this arguments is flawed from some aspects w...
^^^^
Line 5, column 249, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...o pay more for traditional instruction. Also the online courses need an infrastructu...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 295.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4406779661 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98061533859 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579661016949 0.468620217663 124% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 97.5195137168 57.8364921388 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.75 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9166666667 5.70786347227 209% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248000490466 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951097484161 0.0743258471296 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692489365721 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15906180158 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825534600827 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.32208582834 115% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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