People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
The author infers that people's behavior is largely determined by external forces rather than internal. Some might believe that human behaves by their own choice not by others. Actually Human is the most intelligent species and they have liberties to choose option based their own values. However I believe that external forces such as environment and other people can cause one's behavior. Mainly behavior of a person can not be explained by internal force solely and it can varied by outside factors: their milieu, other people, society, etc.
First of all, some people claim that every behavior is finally chosen by their own criteria not by other's. For example, let us consider Gautama Buddha who was born into an aristocratic family in country Shaka. He was influenced largely by his wealthy environment and expected to be the king of Shaka. However after he noticed too much patients and starvation in his country he finally renounced his status and wealth and became traveler and philosopher. Some people might claim his behavior of choosing to be philosopher and traveler rather than choosing wealth and prospective future was based on internal force not on external force. However even though his behavior was not typical, internal motives were not solely responsible for his behavior. Would he chose same option even if he didn't recognized country's dark side? His untypical choice was also derived by outer environment such as presence of starving and deficient citizens in his country.
Secondly, people's behavior are largely affected by other's. There are many evidence that people does not behave solely. For example, lets consider mob psychology what Tarde and Singhele had established. Mob psychology presents bandwagon effect as one example of affect what other can cause to one's action. Bandwagon effect implies that people sometimes choose a popular option just because other also select that option. For example, "Nearly sold out" which company usually use for their advertisement actually make other consumers buy the product merely because many people purchase it. Likewise in stock investment, novice usually purchase stocks which are famous because they are trendy and not because they actually think these stocks are prospective.
Finally, environments affects one's character and ability of perception which influence behaviors a lot. Research by Francis in Emory university discovered that one's nature and intelligence are largely affected by milieu after his/her birth. To illustrate, let us consider identical twin experiment. The experiment showed that there were lots of difference among identical twins when they were raised and lived in different environment even though identical twin originally share all of their genes. One's values are usually determined by their environment. If he/she was in impecunious condition, he/she might regard money as most important. Or If he/she was under stress because of usual fight between their parents, he/she might consider love as most important. Likewise external forces such as environment can cause tremendous effect on one's values and behavior.
Examples of external force's influence have been presented to state that people's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. In conclusion, I agree with the author's view that rather than internal motives, outer environment can explain one's behavior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, however, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2883.0 2235.4752809 129% => OK
No of words: 528.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46022727273 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62036285835 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492424242424 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 930.6 704.065955056 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.68384564 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352175178758 0.243740707755 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100111368971 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120222648969 0.0758088955206 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239457176792 0.150359130593 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127703963767 0.0667264976115 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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