Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Parents always are seeking the best possible way to prepare their beloved teenagers for their future life. Opinions are divided as to whether a part-time job is the best option to help children be prepared for their adult life or not. Personally, It is my firm conviction that taking a part-time job by teenagers would be surely helpful for their adulthood. I will develop my standpoint through two rational reasons, noted in the following essay.
The first significant reason to be mentioned is that a part-time job clears out the value of money which is the most necessary in today's modern world. In the other words, when a teenager takes a part-time job realizes that making money, in reality, is not easy, at all. Therefore, they will be more motivated to spend money rationally. My friend who is from a wealthy family is a great example of this. his parents were always complaining that their son has addicted to waste money. Consequently, they cut his daily budget and made him work partially at a restaurant. Thereby, my friend who was used to wasting money had to count on every dollar he earns to make the end of the month. Had he never forced to take a part-time job, he never would have found that the value of money and its role in adult life.
The second remarkable point to be stated is that having a part-time job is a great way to practice for adulthood's responsibilities. To be more specific, when teenagers work somewhere to learn how to handle their work-life besides their personal life, which is exceedingly important in everyone's adulthood. My brother, for example, is partially working in a coffeehouse. he is studying as well. Although, at first it was hard for him to take care of his responsibilities as a student and a waiter. He managed the situation that was such a good practice to be able to cope with similar situations in his upcoming life. Had he never taken a part-time job, he could not have learned how to do sharply different responsibilities.
To wrap up what has been discussed, encouraging teenagers to have a part-time job is crucial for preparing them for their adult life because they will learn to make money and its value in their life. Besides, doing a job partially prepare teenagers on how to deal with different responsibilities as a big part of adulthood.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...their future life. Opinions are divided as to whether a part-time job is the best option to h...
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Line 2, column 403, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: His
...lthy family is a great example of this. his parents were always complaining that th...
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Line 3, column 370, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
... is partially working in a coffeehouse. he is studying as well. Although, at first...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73200992556 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8545170599 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501240694789 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2798502972 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8095238095 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1904761905 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377879450987 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113119078701 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109033086099 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276305758724 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121933026616 0.0645574589148 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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