In some countries students who misbehave have to leave the school and are not allowed to continue their education. In other countries they can return to their studies after a suspension period. Discuss both options and give your opinion.
Rules are very important in our society, and especially severe they are in schools and universities. Students go to school in order to get deep knowledge to be successful person in future. That is why, some rules are very cruel such as sending down of student because of misbehave.
On the one hand, this rule is very useful in order to show students that misbehave in schools is impossible and it will be punish very strong. But, on the other hand, it has many disadvantages. First of all, this leaving from school will spoil the future of student and can also cross out all desire to study at all. Second of all, some pupils are so delicate that they can bring some kind of mental disease and will continue their life in hospital. Thirdly, some teenagers after this situation can go on the wrong track and become drug addict, alcohol addict or criminals.
There is less cruel type of punishment such as students who misbehave have to leave from school only for year and that they have right to continue studying. This rule has more advantages than disadvantages as the previous one. Speaking of this punishment, it is important to say that this year without school is the thinking period. Student has to think about his behave and understand that it is wrong and can damage not only his education but also students’ in his class. Furthermore, pupil has an opportunity to study at home all year in order to be the first when he comes back. And finally, the most important advantage is that this rule doesn’t damage nobody’s future and quite the contrary it compel to think and to change in future.
In conclusion, I support the second type of punishment because, I think that school rules have to study and not to spoil student’s future.
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