It is true that cultural background has a different impact on how they educated their children to achieve the goal. In terms of achievement, it appears that children are always told to make an effort on certain matters in order to receive positive results. However, this phenomenon can cause two side effects when children follow the order that they believe.
In Asia, It is undoubtedly that they have been taught to always try their best to complete the tasks. Of course, everything has a price and you can’t get it for free. In order to gain the expectation, which means you should make an effort to achieve it. They believe It is beneficial to educate children on how to make effort for their expectation, which is a crucial skill to dealing with modern society. Children who had been taught to try harder to get what they want, had the most potential ability to complete the task and process a positive result. For example, most celebrities are not born from rich families or had a natural talent, but they have been through several efforts and failure to be a successful person. Therefore, it’s beneficial to tell children to work harder with their tasks that can stimulate their potential abilities.
However, everyone has a different ability to cope with success, and sometimes hard work does not always come with a positive result. When children believe that they can finally gain their wish after they make an effort, but the high expectation can lead to frustration or self-doubt if they fail. They might be rejected to try the same thing if the outcome is an unexpected outcome. Moreover, the other downside effect is that children might become lack of confidence. They might start to query with their ability for why they can not achieve it even if they spend a lot of time on it. Moreover, the worsen circumstances can result in lack of motivation, they start to not be interested in work for purpose as it might not come out with what they expected. Therefore, parents play an important role to guide their children in order to build up their confidence.
In conclusion, the two side effects can cause different results to the children who can not achieve what they expected. Parents are the key models who can take a lead to encourage them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 597, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ey spend a lot of time on it. Moreover, the worsen circumstances can result in lack of mot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, of course, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 392.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79336734694 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55449635638 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456632653061 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9746263669 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8947368421 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6315789474 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335655871499 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116408134584 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073798261024 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233905781026 0.151304729494 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405367012295 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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