Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, in this hectic world in which we live, being able to make a living is a boom which help people to live in a calm situation. Having a job which provide you a stable living condition is somehow a dream sondition through which you can follow your other dreams. While some people think we should try to find our dream job position to apply for that, others believe that landing on the first secure job position is a prudent course of makin decision. In my opinion, having a secure job even it is not your dream is enough attractive to pursue that. In the following essay, I will elaborate on my reasons.
To begin with, a secure job is a real golden opportunity in whcih everybody could make a living. Having this chance help you stay away from huge worries and stress of unemployment which cause many people suffer from othre detrimental health ailments. To put it into perspective, I remember, my brother had a big worry of finding a well-paid secure job position when he graduate from university. Because of his student loan debt, he needed to find a job through which would pay off his personal and student debt. It happened in the middle of financial ressecion in my country and he would apply for many jobs to find a temporary or per diem job. In that stressful time, he had some mental disorder just because of those worry. He could not make enough money to pay his own debt, yet alone to make a good living. If he had had a secure job, he would enjoyed his youth plentiful.
Furthermore, stable and secure job provide people a sustainable income by which people are able to make a prospective financial budget for their fiscal years. Consequently, they can focus on their plans and endeavor to achive their goals with a satisfiying sense of humor. By way of example, one friend on mine, who started working in his father's company right away after graduation, have planned to continue his education through remote-learning courses which a high-rank universitiy offered through on-line education programs. He made a crowning achivment because he was free of stress of making money in all these years just because of his secure job position he had.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that landing on a secure job position is a matter of life. This is because we need to make a living for ourselves and our family specially being free of debt and because secure job help us focus on our palns to improve in our life and making our success story achieveable .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, if, so, well, while, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64840182648 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58124656659 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513698630137 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4027486983 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.157894737 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0526315789 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220837946534 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077502715764 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469254075347 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138691597724 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363070503273 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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