In today's world, driven by technologies, people living in every part of the country are independent of where they live, which country they live, etc. It defines the independence of people diversely. People also leave their hometowns and their communities for various purposes. Yes, I agree to the statement that it is a good idea to live away from parents when people become adults instead of staying at home for their entire life.
It is necessary for adults to become more independent and live upon themselves. They learn the ups and downs of life. Adults who stay with their parents are more likely to be dependent upon their parents for fulfilling their every necessity. For example, I have a cousin who used to stay with his parents although he was already an adult. He was more immature and he was totally dependent upon his parents to decide everything. He acted as a child and he was so close to his mother that he required his mother in every task he did. Due to this he could never become an independent individual.
Secondly, as more adults are away from their parents they become more mature and set their career. They even find their life partner of their choice. They get various job opportunities. People will also not have any restriction and awkwardness, as they live away from their parents. They will be able to fulfill all their dreams in one or the other way. For example, I had a friend of mine who lived away from their parents and settled down with one of the finest jobs at Oracle. He always wanted to travel and he got an opportunity to live in Canada.
People are born free and people nowadays decide not to stay with their family. Whereas, some do stay with their parents due to some personal issues . I'd better prefer living independently, away from my parents instead of staying at their home for my entire life.
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- TOEFL essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives Which viewpoint do you agree with Use specific reasons
- When schools do not have enough funding or teachers some people think physical education classes should be cut while others believe that courses in art and music should be eliminated first Which do you think is preferable and why 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Suggestion: .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, second, secondly, so, whereas, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68501529052 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44702954601 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477064220183 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 489.6 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4675313131 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9523809524 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5714285714 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.80952380952 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.480413759084 0.236089414692 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162486133238 0.076458572812 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124832970534 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.342843998182 0.150856017488 227% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106165255717 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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