It is true that music can inspire our soul and purify our mind. Some people believed that music has a significant element to bring different generation and nations together . I totally agree that music definitely connect people in many ways whether the cultural background or ages.
Before the language was established, human used to communicate with other by music. Our ancestors used to whistle in different sounds to recognise others' actions when they hunt the food in the jungles. The long and short speech whistle could spread to a hundred mile distance, so people who live on the other side of the village could receive the message from others. After several years, the invention of music instruments has changed a lot. Humans started to play the melodies and write the lyrics, that was how the song had been created. Humans started to play music to express their feelings, so more songs had been created and spread to the worldwide. Therefore, it became a magical power that continues to influence people all over the world.
In my opinion, music is a universal art, every person is able to enjoy listening to music, and it does not depend on what age or from which cultural background a person is. Every nation in the world has musical instruments and creates musical compositions in order to reveal their stories and emotions. The music has a tone of sense that triggers our emotion when people have been through a similar circumstance. Music also brings joy to everyone when people hear their favourite song in the public. In the pub, they tend to play pop songs in order to stimulate people’s excitement, so they can release the pressure via sing or dancing with their friends, even the strangers. So music becomes a significant element that different nationalities can easily understand the others' expressions.
In conclusion, as a human that we used to communicate by music in the past. It appears that music can stimulate all human’s minds when they have experienced similar stories. Wherever they came from or in what ages that music always has a magical element to bring everyone together.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95505617978 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60873807858 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530898876404 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.211458227 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8421052632 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7368421053 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 7.06120827912 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263897953432 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849703948306 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716113428957 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178870534961 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848419380105 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.