some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It is believed that right from childhood, every child depends on their parent and immediate family one way or another. Should independency of a child from his parents be considered at an early stage or later in the child's life? This essay will use some examples and reasons to illustrate why a young adult should live with their families for a longer time.
First, a young adult needs to experience life from his/her parents perspective. Reason being that,most of our parents have had a similiar experience a child would face while they were also a teenager; experience is the best teacher and our parents have gathered such over their years on earth. For example, my mother would always tell me a story about her childhood, how her own mother would sit her down to tell her about life in general. she says her mother's past experiences were similar to the ones she was currently living in and whenver she finds herself in any similar situation, she would do what her mother did to manage the situation. My mother now does the same thing to us now. ,My point being that , if my grandmother had not made my mother see things from her perspective, she would not have made some good decisions about life.
Second, I believe a young adult needs to learn about societal behavior. It is often said that charity begins at home so, how else would a young adult fare outside if he wasnt thought how to behave in a polite manner by his parent. A typical example was when I decided to move to the boarding house during my high school days. I was not exposed to living with so many people in the room while I was at home, so this posed a challenge to me as I loved my privacy. People would come to my bunk, mess it up unapologetically , I would have snapped at them and this may have lived to us being physical but I did not do that, instead I percivered until everyone became acquinted and respected each other.
This essay discusssed a child learning from his/her parents perspective and learning more about societal behaiours. In conclusion I believe a young adult should live with their families for a longer time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57519788918 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47353570894 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54617414248 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3698294235 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.375 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6875 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235987620928 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101960312252 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121895534829 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193885154271 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0999520459883 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.