People should be encouraged to do leisure activities such as mountain climbing or sailing alone round the world even though these activities may be dangerous because this will help to develop their courage and confidence To what extent do you agree or dis

Leisure activities such as mountain climbing, sailing alone round the world could be risky, but, in my opinion the government and the family must always boast the one’s who are enthusiastic about the same as it can be the deciding factor for the person’s courage and confidence.

In my opinion, the people who are enthusiastic in terms of taking these life threatening activities as their hobby must be supported because today the activities like mountain climbing and sailing across the world alone is considered as the activity which can fetch you the world records. Therefore, building confidence. It not only bring the person the required fame but also the country he belongs to the required recognition. Government gives special rewards and awards to the people who bring this attention to their region too. That is the biggest reason people take up trainings to climb mountains as tall as Mount Everest.

Secondly, some of the dangerous sports are even included in the Olympics in the recent times, such as cross country cycling in which the path is laid across tge steep hill, the narrow roads and death valleys. It can be risky but, if you win there is no big honour in getting rewarded with Olympics medal and getting known worldwide.

Othet reason could be, the money it involves. If we talk about car racing or motor racing, it is one of the most life threatening sports but people still see it as a career and make their living out of it, keeping life at stake because of tge high paying nature of the job.

Also, the biggest reason in today’s era is that people wants to become Internet famous and grab all the eyeballs and get known around the globe in a short span of time. Hence, doing these activities as the media coverage is very high in terms of of national and international media for the sports.

But, there are many things which one must always take care of. Proper training must be taken in regards to the sports opted ad if not taken, could lead to paralysing the body parts for life if not death when once done in a wrong fashion and with that the use of proper equipments and tools must be made. Suitable for the sports opted like shoes, guards and protective gear etc.

Hence, these sports must be encouraged and adopted with a disciplined manner so that no injury can happen and life is not in danger.

Votes
Average: 8.3 (5 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this life' or 'these lives'?
Suggestion: this life; these lives
...who are enthusiastic in terms of taking these life threatening activities as their hobby m...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... as tall as Mount Everest. Secondly, some of the dangerous sports are even included in t...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 244, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...he media coverage is very high in terms of of national and international media for th...
^^^^^
Line 11, column 94, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
... care of. Proper training must be taken in regards to the sports opted ad if not taken, could...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 219, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a wrong fashion" with adverb for "wrong"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ts for life if not death when once done in a wrong fashion and with that the use of proper equipme...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 413.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70217917676 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37454110061 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52784503632 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.5217884844 49.4020404114 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.375 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8125 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277316557914 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746831661425 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822355835832 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122820786324 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773941639948 0.056905535591 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this life' or 'these lives'?
Suggestion: this life; these lives
...who are enthusiastic in terms of taking these life threatening activities as their hobby m...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... as tall as Mount Everest. Secondly, some of the dangerous sports are even included in t...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 244, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...he media coverage is very high in terms of of national and international media for th...
^^^^^
Line 11, column 94, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
... care of. Proper training must be taken in regards to the sports opted ad if not taken, could...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 219, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a wrong fashion" with adverb for "wrong"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ts for life if not death when once done in a wrong fashion and with that the use of proper equipme...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 413.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70217917676 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37454110061 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52784503632 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.5217884844 49.4020404114 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.375 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8125 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277316557914 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746831661425 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822355835832 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122820786324 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773941639948 0.056905535591 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.