The graph illustrates the developments of 4 diseases, namely AIDS, Malaria, Smallpox and Tuberculosis during childhood in developing countries from 1950 to 2000.
Overall, it’s worth to note that the Smallpox existed between 1950 and 1970, after 1970 this type of disease disappeared. However, from 1970 the countries began to suffer from new illness called AIDS.
The first noticeable thing is that the annual cases of Tuberculosis and Smallpox declined significantly for the first 3 decades. Tuberculosis saw a decrease from 8000 cases to 5000 and the figure for Smallpox declined from around 4000 to 2000. But the number of cases for Malaria experienced fluctuation around 2000 cases between 1950 and 1970.
For the following three decades the pattern for Malaria stayed unchanged. Moreover, there was a remarkable increase in cases of AIDS, rising from 1000 in 1980 to roughly 5000 in 2000. It was recorded 1000 AIDS cases in 1980 before experiencing fivefold increase at the end of the given period . The trend for Tuberculosis constituted just over 2000 in 1980. Further, it rose steadily, reaching around 4000 cases by 2000. (By Shera)
The graph illustrates the developments of 4 diseases, namely AIDS, Malaria, Smallpox and Tuberculosis during childhood in developing countries from 1950 to 2000.
Overall, it’s worth to note that the Smallpox existed between 1950 and 1970, after 1970 this type of disease disappeared. However, from 1970 the countries began to suffer from new illness called AIDS.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to suffer from new illness called AIDS. The first noticeable thi...
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Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... increase at the end of the given period . The trend for Tuberculosis constituted ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1284.0 965.302439024 133% => OK
No of words: 240.0 196.424390244 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77403193581 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441666666667 0.547539520022 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 350.1 283.868780488 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9749441057 43.030603864 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7142857143 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.35714285714 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207991409711 0.215688989381 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874095099816 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10350890991 0.0843802449381 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16214147404 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120130638948 0.0819641961636 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to suffer from new illness called AIDS. The first noticeable thi...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 293, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... increase at the end of the given period . The trend for Tuberculosis constituted ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1284.0 965.302439024 133% => OK
No of words: 240.0 196.424390244 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77403193581 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441666666667 0.547539520022 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 350.1 283.868780488 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9749441057 43.030603864 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7142857143 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.35714285714 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207991409711 0.215688989381 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874095099816 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10350890991 0.0843802449381 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16214147404 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120130638948 0.0819641961636 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.