‘Last year, Kensington Academy turned over management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift Nutrition. This company serves low-fat, low-calorie meals that the students do not find enjoyable- my son and several of his friends came home yesterday complaining about the lunch options. While the intent of hiring swift may have been to cause students to eat healthier foods, the plan is going to cause the students to bring their own, less healthy lunches instead of eating cafeteria food. If Swift is not replaced by another vendor, then there will be serious health consequences for the Kensington students.’
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The letter to the principal of the school, sent by the parent reveals concern about the health of their child caused by the change in food quality. This cautiousness can be said justifiable and if the issue, the parent is trying to make through the argument is proved true, then it cannot not be taken off blithely. The parent chastises Swift Nutrition for abating the food quality and consequently causing out serious health consequences among the students. However, before jumping to any conclusion about the consequences of Swift Nutrition in health of students, we must answer three main questions.
Firstly, do all the students find the meal insipid or unenjoyable? Maybe it’s only their son and some of his friend find it unenjoyable. Maybe the food tastes decent and it’s only some students who don’t like it. Let’s take an example, may be the Swift Nutrition serves egg in their meal and some students hate its taste. The preference and proclivity towards food can be very nimble among the students. If this is the case, then the argument stated by the parent in the letter doesn’t hold water.
Secondly, do the company serve low-fat and low-calories food? What is the basis for this allegation? Is the parent talking on the basis of any data or research? Is the food on the cafeteria been subjected to nutritional research? If not, then and the inference cannot be drawn from it and the assumption of low-fat and low-calories is flawed. It is possible for foods to be high in nutritional value that though look less enjoyable. If the scenario is similar to this, then the assertion the parent is trying to make is baseless.
Thirdly, will there be serious health consequence if the Swift Nutrition is not replaced by any other cafeteria? What are the evidences of baneful health consequences resulting from the food at the cafeteria? Let’s assume even if the food is low on nutrition and is less enjoyable, this doesn’t mean this will keep on continue. It’s possible that the cafeteria will improve the food being served and its nutritional value. If these questions cannot be answered judiciously then the letter would not hold ground of being empirical.
To draw any conclusion on the consequences of the Swift Nutrition on the food related to the health of child these above-mentioned questions must be answered. If any one of these questions cannot be answered rationally with proper evidences, then the parent’s allegations towards the cafeteria is baseless and the arguments doesn’t hold water.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 423, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...being served and its nutritional value. If these questions cannot be answered judi...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01421800948 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75109400555 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452606635071 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0689110532 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1666666667 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5833333333 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192992135877 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686410989101 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713513566211 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118441803556 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682108127336 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 423, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...being served and its nutritional value. If these questions cannot be answered judi...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01421800948 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75109400555 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452606635071 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0689110532 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1666666667 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5833333333 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192992135877 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686410989101 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713513566211 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118441803556 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682108127336 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.