many shops and fast food chains use advertising and marketing which is aimed at children. To what extent should the government control this phenomenon?
Many businesses invest in advertising to purpose an attracting children who are easily influenced. I agree that using adverts impact on young people and the government should tackle this issue.
There are several reason why I believe that teenagers can be attracted by advertising from shops. Firstly, using adverts will make children curious. This is because they are interested about new things when they saw them. For example, MC Donald advertise fried chicken on television such as producers introduce about the process of chicken cook. Therefore, the youngest feel craving and promote to purchase them. Secondly, it helps investors earn more profit through advertising. For instance, many customers always find milk for their babies so advertising is very necessary for them. Parents can research milk through adverts about materials and high quality. It leads to demand consumers increased and producers can earn money from adverts.
There are two reasons why the government should control this issue. First of all, advertising control prevents businesses to selling low quality of products. To illustrate, many retailers sell toys that contain chemical ingredients. If parents buy toys without an unknown sources or do not have introduction about materials, it will be very dangerous. As a result, it has the potential to cause cancer in children due to toxins in toys as phthalates. Furthermore, the government should use their advertising control to enforce regulations with fines and civil court cases. When a business erects a billboard that against advertising control, the state will notify this producers of their disposal. Therefore, adverts are able to strict control.
In conclusion, using adverts attract youngest and it brings drawbacks for them because children are very inquisitive about new things which they do not aware them good or bad. If the government do not solve this problem, children can be difficult about awareness anything.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46052631579 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76021146165 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592105263158 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.1963405901 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.0476190476 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4761904762 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7619047619 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222793015512 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675992046075 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597913497508 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153626810731 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605704123176 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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