Task 2 Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Task 2: Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, education has become in a matter of discussion. Some lecturers believe that children should be taught play classical musician. In the essay, I strongly agree with this sentence.
There are several reasons why I agree that teenagers should be learned to play a musical instrument. Firstly, playing instruments assist students creative in both study and music. For examples, history and geography subjects have a lots of theories to make student difficult learning so students can write song which contain information of these subjects. As a result, it helps students acquire knowledge quickly. Secondly, student can unwind after stressful day when they play musical instruments. For instances, playing piano and guitar have low music note with deep sound which make people relaxed and recharge the battery for themselfs. Thus, schools should teach students about not only know music but also play fluent instruments. Musical instruments are a effective way to be good children entertainment.
Nevertheless, I also feel that some teachers do not want to teach student about play instruments for several reasons. First of all, students can neglect other subjects due to only focusing on playing musician. To illustrate, some children learn the first time play piano and they feel fascinated with this. They are able to invest their time or effort to practice play it and it can also distract teenager’s attention from more important subjects such as math or English. Although play classical musician is very necessary, we should spend little time to study about this subject.
In conclusion, some educationalists feel that youngers should be studied about playing musical instruments. In my opinion, I totally agree that students should be learned how play orchestral instruments because it can help them to full of energy and develop their brain about creative. If students play instruments, it will enhance the quality of their study.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
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Line 2, column 762, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...nt instruments. Musical instruments are a effective way to be good children enter...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35064935065 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7682222595 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574675324675 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.232145882 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7368421053 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2105263158 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63157894737 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261734304084 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970742811962 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817377083291 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180236829144 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449778659713 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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