The following appeared in a letter to the city council of Canbury from the president of Plexma Motors.
"I am pleased that the council is considering Plexma`s plans to open a new manufacturing site in Canbury next year. In addition to our regular line of cars, Plexma has also begun designing and testing a line of automated self-driving vehicles. In a recent survey conducted by local media, 60 percent of Canbury`s residents reported that they would purchase a Plexma self-driving vehicle in the future if they were confident in the vehicles` safety. We are happy to report that last summer, we tested our new line of self-driving vehicles in downtown Canbury with great success. Not only did our five tested vehicles remain accident-free for two months during testing, but in a survey conducted after testing, 90 percent of Canbury`s residents reported that when they were downtown and our vehicles were in operation they felt very safe. Because steady demand for our self-driving vehicles will create new jobs and thereby greatly benefit Canbury`s economy as a whole, I recommend that you vote to allow Plexma to begin manufacturing and selling these vehicles in Canbury."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The letter from the president of Plexma Motors states that citizens in Canbury should vote to allow Plexma to begin manufacturing and selling these vehicles in Canbury. Because a survey conducted by local media indicates that 60 percent of residents in Canbury would purchase a Plexma self-driving vehicle in the future, and it will create new jobs and bring great benefit for Canbury's economy. However, several questions need to be answered to make the statement as plausible as it stands.
To begin, the letter cites a survey conducted by local media that 60 percent of residents would purchase Plexma's vehicle in the future. Notwithstanding, can the survey appropriately represent the whole population in Canbury? If there are 2 million residents living in Canbury, but the survey only investigated 20 people, it may be too confident to assert that there will be 60 percent of the population interested in the vehicle from Plexma. Moreover, readers do not know whether the local media has any preference to Plexma. If it does, then maybe the survey was not as impartial as the president thinks.
Secondly, the letter claims that vehicles from Plexma have passed 5 different safety tests, and also cites another survey conducted after the test that 90 percent of people think vehicles from Plexma are safe. Still, what was the content in that survey? Since different ways that a questionnaire asks questions can bring completely different results. For example, if one of the question in the survey asked "Self-driving vehicles from Plexma can hit the brake automatically when it detects other cars and passengers, do you think the car is safe?" it could bring more positive reception from participants. On the other hand, if the questionnaire did not mention the fancy functions of the vehicle, the reception may not be able to be as positive as the previous one.
Finally, the letter argues that steady demand for vehicles will create new jobs and bring greater benefit to Canbury. However, what is the cost that it will bring to Canbury? Maybe Canbury is a city that has stricter policy for its ecology and environment, and most people care more about their living quality than their wage. In this case, bringing more factories could cause irreversible negative effects such as air or water pollution and so on. Thus, allowing Plexma to begin manufacturing in Canbury may not be completely good for the city.
To make the statement as convincing as it stands, the president of Plexma Motors has to answer the questions mentioned above.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 421 350
No. of Characters: 2074 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.53 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.926 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.659 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.864 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... future. Notwithstanding, can the survey appropriately represent the whole popula...
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Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...l, what was the content in that survey? Since different ways that a questionnaire ask...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, as to, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 421.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09026128266 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7874207939 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489311163895 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2047950443 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.789473684 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1578947368 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211198899686 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705238391149 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658640951225 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13641382131 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482505035064 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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