In today's modern era it is often argued that starting your own business is much more reliable rather than working for a private institution or a company. Therefore, I believe that opening your own business with some new idea would be much better for mental health as well as you will also be able to learn and gain experience through out the work. However, people who work for companies and institutions might have better opportunities but they also experience a lot of pressure while working for them. In these essay we will discuss on how both the modes work in the life of human beings.
At first we know that these days entrepreneurs are growing rapidly these days with new business ideas they have been succeeding and competing to many of the privately owned institutions and companies. Having a own business will also help in mental health process because we don't grow through any kind of pressure from any one our mental health stays positive and we would also be more focused and determined towards what we love to do. In this process you will also be able to gain a lot of experience in the business sector which will be a plus point for you to gain new experiences and start your own new business. For example, there's a man named Elon Musk he is the owner of Tesla company who was the first person to create vehicles which runs through electricity his ideas were so impressive that his business got successful and now he is considered as worlds top 1 richest man.
There are many people who work for private companies and institutions who often earn quiet well and get different opportunities such as they get to travel different places for business purpose furthermore, they will learn and experience many things in this phase. Despite, getting all these facilities it is also important that your mental health should be good and you should love your job because there is no point in getting a lot of money and opportunities if your mental health is not okay. For example, there is a friend of mine who works in a top most earning company called Cloud Factory where he earns quiet well but usually experience pressure from the employers which has effected him mentally and is now going through depression. Hence, It is very important have job satisfaction in life which will create support your mental health.
To conclude, I would like to say that in my opinion it is better to start your own business because it is usually stress free and you would also enjoy your job, stay happy which is good for mental health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...so be able to learn and gain experience through out the work. However, people who work for ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...wned institutions and companies. Having a own business will also help in mental h...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...elp in mental health process because we dont grow through any kind of pressure from ...
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Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
... grow through any kind of pressure from any one our mental health stays positive and we...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...art your own new business. For example, theres a man named Elon Musk he is the owner o...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'stressed'.
Suggestion: stressed
...your own business because it is usually stress free and you would also enjoy your job,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, kind of, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 447.0 315.596192385 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67337807606 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48312070255 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472035794183 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.2975951904 168% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.7172398003 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.692307692 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.3846153846 20.7667163134 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3846153846 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211379986765 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892710970722 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539490706874 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153091431031 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791199771057 0.056905535591 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.89 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.1190380762 154% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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