TPO 45- independent writing taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use s
In this progressive and sophisticated world, making decisions, especially about crucial subjects in life is one of the challenging things that young people deal with. In such situations, some rely on their parents to make wiser decisions. A controversial question, which is often raised regarding this issue is whether youngsters depend on their parents less compared with the past for making decisions or not. Different people hold different views according to their previous experiences. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that in today's world youths are less dependent on their parents for making decisions. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first noteworthy reason coming to my mind is that having access to a wide variety of reliable resources like knowledge from school or media makes youngsters capable of making logical decisions without needing their parent’s advice. Nowadays, the significant part of preparing young people for the future life has been fulfilled by the education system. During their school days, they learn how to cope with hardships and making important decisions through practical courses besides their mandatory courses. Moreover, all people including youth have surrounded with a plethora of TV channels that the most parts of their programs are educational ones about various subjects. Those kinds of programs raise youngster's awareness about thousands of things that will support them when struggling to make decisions.
Another exquisite point to be mentioned is that in this hectic world parents are busy with their backbreaking tasks at work which has an adverse influence on their relationship with their children. Since there is no close relationship between parents and children in comparison to the past, they usually do not ask their parents to give them useful advice. In addition, the lack of this relationship leads to the closeness of young people with their friends and rely on them when confronting a dilemma of how to make a better decision. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My parents work from dawn to dusk, consequently, we do not spend much time together. My friends were the ones who help me to choose my college major, my partner, and etc.
To summarize, from what has been discussed above, I firmly believe in today’s society young people do not rely on their parents since they have access to a great array of resources that helps them to depend on themselves. Besides, nowadays, there is no close relationship between parents and children which gets them away from each other, resulting in they do not ask their parents to help them for making the right decision.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 673, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ly, we do not spend much time together. My friends were the ones who help me to ch...
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Line 3, column 750, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...to choose my college major, my partner, and etc. To summarize, from what has been discu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2287.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1393258427 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73530689321 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525842696629 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6369997208 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.368421053 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4210526316 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68421052632 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394467396649 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123485172348 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062373587421 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253656835279 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044962115022 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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