Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most businesspeople are motivated only by the desire for more money
In this progressive and sophisticated world, there are a great variety of incentives for business people to do their job, money is one of them. A controversial question,
which is often raised in this regard, is that whether the desire for more money is the only factor that motivates businessman to do their job or not. Different people hold different perspectives according to their previous experiences, as far as, I am concerned, I am of the opinion that the money is the prominent incentive for businessman. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first noteworthy reason coming to my mind is that money gives them not only security but also power. In the modern world, people depend on money more than at any time in human history. For providing your family with the basic necessities, such as shelter, food, medication, and leisure supports you need money. Without money, consequently, the lack of each of these necessary elements threatens our lives. For instance, if someone diagnosed with cancer has not enough money, he will die because he cannot afford the expensive expenses of the curing process. Moreover, making convenient life can only possible by obtaining a sufficient amount of money. For the household appliances, car, and travel we need enough money in our bank account.
Apart from that, the more wealth you possess, the more powerful you will be. This is the reason that rich people have an unquestionable role in making important decisions not only for their own life but also for the lives of others.
Another exquisite point to be mentioned is that having considerable money can give a businessman prestige. In modern society, we witness how affluent people are respected and admired not only by the media but also by ordinary people. In addition, youth have respected wealthy people and choose them as role models. As a result, all of this is an external stimulus that pushes people to want to make more money. For instance, in the infamous and popular talk show, most guests are wealthy businessmen, I have never seen ordinary people among the guests.
To summarize, from what has been discussed above, I firmly believe that money is the most motivation for businessmen, as it not only gives them security and comfort but also prestige and respect. This is why when choosing a job, the most important consideration for people is the income they are supposed to pay.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...ory. For providing your family with the basic necessities, such as shelter, food, medication, and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, apart from, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96618357488 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71785395954 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548309178744 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0220765642 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.8 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308226754511 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889992576345 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559139329502 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159548198043 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466498658342 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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