TPO 39 independent writing Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Many young people have experienced that our careers are being judged and compared by our parents, and it usually leads to a fight that whether it was easier to have a successful job in the past. Personally, I agree that it was easier to identify a secure career before.
First of all, the technologies are advancing rapidly, as the result, every career can change tremendously in a short period of time. A lots of new skills, like programming, data resourcing and utilizing collaboration tools are required for improving competitiveness. For example, my dad was a professor in a university. He taught students as the traditional ways for 30 years. However, just few years to his retirement, he had to learn how to adapt the latest technology into education, such as methods of distant teaching, E-books, online teaching materials…etc. It is difficult to predict how the technologies can change an industry, so the stability and success of a job is hard to foresee.
Secondly, globalization force us to compete with people all over the world which is challenging to workers. In the past, people only need to compete with workers in our nations. However, it is easier for companies to invite outstanding foreigners to work nowadays, and if employment in Taiwan is not efficient, companies can transfer their factories or service points to developing countries. To speak from my personal experience, when I was an intern, my colleague was a German. He has better English skills and he is braver to express his perspective on jobs than Taiwanese students. That is to say, it is very difficult to identify whether we will be outstanding because human resources are exchanging globally.
Admittedly, it is undeniable that to have a successful career in the past had also need to be intelligent and competitive. The personalities of successful people have never changed. Nevertheless, the over-all situation of the working environment makes fewer people can become successful.
To sum up, it was easier to identify what type of career would lead to a secure, successful future because of the technology is improving and globalization are undergoing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...reer can change tremendously in a short period of time. A lots of new skills, like programming...
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Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: A lot; Lots
...tremendously in a short period of time. A lots of new skills, like programming, data r...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rces are exchanging globally. Admittedly, it is undeniable that to hav...
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Line 7, column 84, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'needed'.
Suggestion: needed
... successful career in the past had also need to be intelligent and competitive. The ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, for example, such as, first of all, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17948717949 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18181709606 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575498575499 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7138137722 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237236146116 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715211064281 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925038714024 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160470423997 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113265496249 0.0645574589148 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.