Imagine you are an undergraduate student, for your final semester what would you
prefer?
1. Conducting an intensive research and writing a paper on the topic.
2. Internship
In the modern era, education has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, most scientists have always searched for ways to enhance educational systems. A controversial question which is often raised in this idea is that whether or not students who are in the last term of the university are either doing some projects or going to some companies and learning some skills or pupils should improve researchers skills at the university. Ibelieve that becoming an intern at well-known companies can vastly provide invaluable experience for an individual or cominuties. In the following, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mention is that by participating in the internship, students learn many social skills. To shed more light on this matter, an individual would become an important person like an engineer, a doctor or a nurse, in future life. To be noted, universities teach students both fundamentals information and ways of searching about their field of studies so that individuals cannot learn important skills such as how to use their knowledge in the industrial situation or how they cooperate with their colleagues. As a result, when they become an intern at a firm, not only are they geting information about how they use their knowledge in the workspace but also are they learn how to handle and manage to cooperate with colleagues. In addition, by entering a professional workplace, ones learn a lot of responsibilities that everyone in an office has to accept. Thus, experiencing the difficulties of such places, they would gain invaluable insight into their future jobs.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that a person who participates in the intern would learn how to use knowledge in work situations. To elaborate on this matter, universities teach students many lessons from especial sources ,as a result, individuals need to indoctrinate how to use these skills in a workspace. Consider a chemical engineer, for instance. She has learned sundry lessons such as thermodynamic and reactor designs at the university; hence, she needs to use all this information in an adequate way.moreover , by participating in doing some tasks in a professional workplace, she understands that how to use academic knowledge in works. More importantly, in the industrial situation, 1she would be able to connect all lessons and use them. For example, for designing a chemical reactor in industrial scales, not only does she use reactor design but also needs thermodynamic.
considering all the aforementioned reasons which describe above, I personally believe that participating in the internship has more beneficial for one rather than to do some projects. By doing work at well-known companies not only do students learn social skills but also they learn how to use their knowledge.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ch is often raised in this idea is that whether or not students who are in the last term of th...
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Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me companies and learning some skills or pupils should improve researchers skills...
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Line 4, column 304, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'fundamentals'' or 'fundamental's'?
Suggestion: fundamentals'; fundamental's
...noted, universities teach students both fundamentals information and ways of searching about...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...dents many lessons from especial sources ,as a result, individuals need to indoctr...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an adequate way" with adverb for "adequate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
..., she needs to use all this information in an adequate way.moreover , by participating in doing so...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... information in an adequate way.moreover , by participating in doing some tasks in...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Considering
...esign but also needs thermodynamic. considering all the aforementioned reasons which de...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2436.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26133909287 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13161309783 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479481641469 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.9904227718 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.210526316 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3684210526 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121213912281 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438404422961 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399859908356 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0772028419907 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241698405382 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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