Q20 : The family has a great influence on children's development, but the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part in children's life. Do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the impact of families on children's behaviour has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that parents play a vital role in the development of children's personalities, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that parents greatly affect the development of children's behaviour. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that young people have a predisposition to mimic their parents' behaviour at the beginning of the socialisation process before receiving primary education. As an illustration, children with parents suffering from obesity because of undesirable eating habits, such as over-consumption of junk food, are more likely to become overweight as they often consume the same unhealthy food eaten by their father and mother. For these reasons, there does seem to be a solid basis for the claim that the parents' role in the development of youngsters' behaviour is crucial.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that only family members exert an influence on children's characteristics. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that in the fiercely competitive society, a myriad of working parents leading a hectic life have difficulty spending enough time with their offspring. Thus, these children communicate more frequently with their friends and teachers than their parents. As a result, they often learn a multitude of behaviour patterns as well as habits from their peers and teachers. In addition, the advancement of technology makes it possible for the youth to make use of time on the Internet, meaning that minors who are generally incapable of distinguishing right from wrong can be exposed to a great deal of harmful and obscene information, which could have a detrimental effect on adolescents' behaviour.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 654, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...be a solid basis for the claim that the parents role in the development of youngsters b...
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Line 5, column 847, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adolescents'' or 'adolescent's'?
Suggestion: adolescents'; adolescent's
...hich could have a detrimental effect on adolescents behaviour. In conclusion, it is u...
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Line 5, column 870, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mental effect on adolescents behaviour. In conclusion, it is undeniable that the...
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38068181818 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03347372 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596590909091 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.006666335 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.266666667 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4666666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157178709271 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521791703878 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055840989602 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0833521662403 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498792305282 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.