Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time . Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own .
Discuss both these views and give your opinion .
It is believed by many people that parents ought to provide encouragement to their children to engage in group activities during their leisure time . While others emphasise the importance of having children learning the art of keeping oneself busy. In my opinion , I consider that participation in team recreational activities has a beneficial effect on both the social and emotional skills as well as skill development of children .
On one hand , some people think it is necessary to push kids towards participation in recreational team activities and I agree with this view as it has a profound influence on social and interpersonal skills . In other words , Doing an activity along with other children enables them to interact with each other and fosters communication between children . For example : kids overcome shyness and hesitation of talking to their peers by indulging in classes like storytelling , extempore ,group discussion classes , group dance. Also, especially kids whose both parents are working and kids are often left with the caregivers , this is a great chance for them to bond and make new friends . Furthermore , it keeps them healthy and mentally astute . For example , playing group sports like basketball , football and cricket has enormous benefits on their health and mental well-being.
On the other hand , kids engaging in activities on their own provides them a feeling of independence and being responsible which ultimately leads to development of critical life skills such as decision making . For example : At home , kids often choose between things to keep themselves busy like doing non-fire cooking , simple household chores or playing with their own toys , watching Tv or dancing . This fosters decision making in the young minds.
Moreover , it is the most cost effective way to keep kids occupied and content . In other words , It saves a lot of finances for some families who may not be able to afford to enroll their kids in expensive clubs.
In conclusion , although kids who acquire the learning of keeping themselves enjoy lots of benefits in their lives , their participation in specialised group activities is the need of an hour in this technological world where majority of kids are addicted to screens.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26536312849 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90555908873 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553072625698 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7727828165 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.666666667 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8666666667 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1333333333 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 35.0 5.01903807615 697% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314789889518 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104401965789 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800552438792 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183088936896 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724355547927 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.