Any political organization that advocates the use of violence to achieve its goal should be prohibited from operating within our nation. Such groups are detrimental to the society since violent, short term solutions can lead to more serious long term problems
In the argument provided above, the author states that , any political organisation that supports violence should be prohibited from operating within the nation. The reasons being stated that, violence causes only long term problems even though they seem to provide short term solutions. The author has jumped to the conclusion without proper explanation and evidences of the political groups, the actions and impact of the group. The argument lacks proper evidences that can posit the conclusion.
Primarily, the author has failed to elaborate the goal of a political party for instigating a violent act. The goal and motto of an organisation has to be defined and explained in order for the masses to understand the purpose of the group. Because, even if there are preliminary strategical differences amongst many political organisations, the ultimate goal of the group has to be analysed. For example, let us consider India's prominent freedome fighters. Mahatma Gandhiji and Subash Chandra Bose. Both the leaders unanimously wanted Free India. Though the methodologies and the strategies implemented by them are completely different. Gandhiji was celebrated for his non violent satyagraha implemented to win the freedom of our country. But on the other hand, Netaji had a completely different method in approaching the British empire. Even though both the leaders wanted the same output, the methods are different. Here, we cannot declare Netaji's act and his Indian National Army party to be derimental to India since the approach is different.
Further more, the author has failed to mention or cite an example of any violence that was instigated by a policital party. Substantiating evidences of acts and reasons behind the same and derimental effects of the society has to be mentioned in order to prohibit the same. Without evidences , we cannot call a political party derimental to the society. Since, the author has failed to cite examples of the events and the nature of the acts committed, the conclusion attained by the author is not completely convincing. Our history is filled with immense examples of political changes. All these were instigated by a small group of people who dreamed big for the betterment of the mankind. Let us consider , French revolution. Without which, democracy wouldnt be normal to as it seems to be. Though the mighty rulers wanted to eradicate the revolutionaries, the ultimatum is for the betterment of the mankind.
And also, major political changes have occured after many violent exhibition of dissatisfaction.
To conclude, without proper evidences supporting his claims such as motive of the political party, effects of any meeting or propaganda by them, the author's claim seems to be highly biased . It seems the author isnt ready to see a radically revolutionarised society.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 449 350
No. of Characters: 2322 1500
No. of Different Words: 229 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.603 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.171 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.86 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 190 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.63 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.843 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.185 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.266 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.436 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Line 1, column 432, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s, the actions and impact of the group. The argument lacks proper evidences that ca...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...logies and the strategies implemented by them are completely different. Gandhiji ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...elebrated for his non violent satyagraha implemented to win the freedom of our co...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... to prohibit the same. Without evidences , we cannot call a political party derime...
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...tterment of the mankind. Let us consider , French revolution. Without which, democ...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
...ch revolution. Without which, democracy wouldnt be normal to as it seems to be. Though...
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... violent exhibition of dissatisfaction. To conclude, without proper evidences su...
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Suggestion: .
... authors claim seems to be highly biased . It seems the author isnt ready to see a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, as to, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2384.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 449.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30957683742 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94301304284 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518930957684 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8509568948 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2962962963 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6296296296 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.40740740741 5.70786347227 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22264866548 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506383536798 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599549810172 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116617264946 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776828468311 0.0628817314937 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 98.500998004 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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