The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown

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The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.

Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.

The chart express, the number of man and women do labour in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.
Overall, The highest performance of both male and female is in public sector. However, they show the lowest performance in public sector .Morever, In all the sectors male performence is higher than femal.
In manufacturing sector women cross 200 in employment .Morever, man crosses 600 in this sector which is double of women performance. In the same way ,In communication sector the employment of both man and women is much less which is 250 .Approximately hulf of manufacturing .
In finance and banking sector the employment of man and women is about 400.
Morever, their participation in wholesale and retail trade , and public sector is too hogh which is about 650 and 850 approximately.However , their employment in public sector is so poor. which is 200 .And the women performance in this sector is approximately 10 which is so poor contribution.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s, the number of man and women do labour in 1975 and 1995 in several employment s...
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... the lowest performance in public sector .Morever, In all the sectors male perform...
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...he lowest performance in public sector .Morever, In all the sectors male performence is...
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...ing sector women cross 200 in employment .Morever, man crosses 600 in this sector ...
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...g sector women cross 200 in employment .Morever, man crosses 600 in this sector which i...
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...le of women performance. In the same way ,In communication sector the employment o...
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... man and women is much less which is 250 .Approximately hulf of manufacturing . I...
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...hich is about 650 and 850 approximately.However , their employment in public sector is ...
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... about 650 and 850 approximately.However , their employment in public sector is so...
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Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...employment in public sector is so poor. which is 200 .And the women performance in th...
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...n public sector is so poor. which is 200 .And the women performance in this sector...
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...public sector is so poor. which is 200 .And the women performance in this sector is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, so, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 3.97073170732 353% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 827.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0736196319 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23783272406 2.65546596893 122% => OK
Unique words: 80.0 106.607317073 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490797546012 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 248.4 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2919451184 43.030603864 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.375 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 1.69756097561 943% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201216183929 0.215688989381 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110637923863 0.103423049105 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800543839641 0.0843802449381 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137260412402 0.15604864568 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0883031205363 0.0819641961636 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.2329268293 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s, the number of man and women do labour in 1975 and 1995 in several employment s...
^^
Line 2, column 136, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... the lowest performance in public sector .Morever, In all the sectors male perform...
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Line 2, column 138, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Morever
...he lowest performance in public sector .Morever, In all the sectors male performence is...
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Line 3, column 54, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ing sector women cross 200 in employment .Morever, man crosses 600 in this sector ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Morever
...g sector women cross 200 in employment .Morever, man crosses 600 in this sector which i...
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Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...le of women performance. In the same way ,In communication sector the employment o...
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Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
... man and women is much less which is 250 .Approximately hulf of manufacturing . I...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Approximately
...an and women is much less which is 250 .Approximately hulf of manufacturing . In finance and...
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Line 3, column 273, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...250 .Approximately hulf of manufacturing . In finance and banking sector the empl...
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Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ticipation in wholesale and retail trade , and public sector is too hogh which is ...
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Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...hich is about 650 and 850 approximately.However , their employment in public sector is ...
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Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... about 650 and 850 approximately.However , their employment in public sector is so...
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Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Which
...employment in public sector is so poor. which is 200 .And the women performance in th...
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Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...employment in public sector is so poor. which is 200 .And the women performance in th...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...n public sector is so poor. which is 200 .And the women performance in this sector...
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Line 5, column 202, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...public sector is so poor. which is 200 .And the women performance in this sector is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, so, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 3.97073170732 353% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 827.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0736196319 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23783272406 2.65546596893 122% => OK
Unique words: 80.0 106.607317073 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490797546012 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 248.4 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2919451184 43.030603864 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.375 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 1.69756097561 943% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201216183929 0.215688989381 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110637923863 0.103423049105 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800543839641 0.0843802449381 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137260412402 0.15604864568 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0883031205363 0.0819641961636 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.2329268293 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.