The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to obesity is increasing. What is the reason for the growth in the number of overweight people in society? How can this problem be solved?
It has been observed that the amount of serious health issues due to obesity is
escalating amongst the people. This problem has given rise to not only physical but mental health issues as well. In my view, there can be plethora of factors those can be considered related to obesity.
An increase in person's weight and consumption of unhealthy diet causes obesity. There can be two reasons those can be considered. One of the reason can be the changing lifestyle. Nowadays, number of people work by sitting at one place which leads to improper digestion of food. For instance, it has been researched that, very less number of workaholic people acquire healthy lifestyle and do not exercise regularly. Unhealthy diet might also be another reason. For example, there might be people who love fast food a lot and want food to be cooked instantly. Since, consumption of the fast food can lead to the growth of the fat's intake and ultimately, the weight of a person is increased.
On the other hand, obesity can be controlled by different ways. For instance, in the school, teachers can conduct training programs to spread awareness of obesity. Moreover, importance of a healthy diet can also be explained. Such programs can also be held in the offices as well. For example, corporate offices have started to inculcate yoga sessions daily before starting the day. In regards with the girls, obesity arises diseases such as PCD. Proper guidance and medications can prevent such health issues. Likewise, small breaks after a meeting in an office can also be considered as a crucial step.
Thus, due to changing lifestyle and competition the ignorance towards health has been augmented. On the contrary, there are number of ways by which obesity can be controlled. In my view, daily exercise and proper diet can mitigate the increasing number of people suffering from obesity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 160, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this can' or 'those cans'?
Suggestion: this can; those cans
... view, there can be plethora of factors those can be considered related to obesity. An...
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Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this can' or 'those cans'?
Suggestion: this can; those cans
...auses obesity. There can be two reasons those can be considered. One of the reason can be...
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Line 4, column 626, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'fats'' or 'fat's'?
Suggestion: fats'; fat's
...fast food can lead to the growth of the fats intake and ultimately, the weight of a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, likewise, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, such as, in my view, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00319488818 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61383641019 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5303514377 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.631366373 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.1818181818 106.682146367 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2272727273 20.7667163134 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04545454545 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353317493544 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982684071216 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489644384609 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191633813796 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535428094054 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.0946893788 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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