The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The topic raises a controversial issue of whether instilling a sense of cooperation rather than competition among youngsters of the society is the best way to prepare them for the leadership role in various sectors. The author's opinion is that cooperation is essential while competition is not. In my opinion, the sense of competition is also necessary for the leadership role capability among youngsters. I majorly disagree with the author's opinion and will argue that instilling a sense of competition is also very necessary for leadership roles assumed by the young generation in various fields.
Firstly, I will like to my argument with the help of an example. In the central government of India, recently, few changes in the ministries allocation were implemented by the PM. The union health minister was replaced acknowledging the mismanagement after the covid second wave. This kind of strict decision has instilled a feeling of competition in the present incumbent minister that he has to derive results otherwise the high command will look for other better office bearers. The example proves the importance of competition and how competition can inspire improvisations and betterment.
Further, I will use an example from the corporate world. Elon musk is a competitor of Jeff Bezos in space-related ventures. This competition is inspiring both of them to do better which is resulting in further enhanced results for the service of mankind. If this competition was not present and replaced by just cooperation, then certainly they would not have pushed themselves this much for the dominance in the venture. This example highlights the importance of competition on the results in the corporate world.
However, in some cases, this may not be true. In NGOs of great importance, there is no requirement of competition and it should be replaced with cooperation to fulfill the collective goal. Someone can argue that cooperation is also an essential quality for a leadership role in all the offices including government, industries, etc. I agree with it but I believe it will be wrong to say that competitive skills are less important.
In conclusion, I believe in almost every field, competitive skills are also very important for the progress and development in the work so, this is also a required skill among the youngsters. To support my argument, the two examples are taken from two prominent work fields of government and the corporate world. This example explicates the importance of instilling competitive skills among youngsters without limiting the importance of cooperative skills. However, there can be some exemptions also to the argument presented depending upon the leadership roles in specific work areas.
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- Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field Write 66
- Over the past year our late night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news During this period most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station s coverage of weather and lo 63
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition 62
- An international development organization in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A While seeds for this new type of millet cost more farmers will be paid 58
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition 16
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...d, the quality of movies are also good. The author has not presented any informatio...
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...vie good from the prospective of public also. The author also claims that there is t...
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...od from the prospective of public also. The author also claims that there is the lo...
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...lect only good movies from public aspect and lack of public awareness of this rev...
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...aspect and lack of public awareness of this reviews led to low audience are highlig...
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...ed assumption of increasing budget will led to high public awareness of the good mo...
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...gument will likely convince few people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2347.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 429.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47086247086 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90078793887 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459207459207 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 739.8 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 18.0 4.99550561798 360% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.399462151 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.761904762 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.52380952381 5.21951772744 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0289690592212 0.243740707755 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0110307502553 0.0831039109588 13% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282970799482 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0195960219566 0.150359130593 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217933443273 0.0667264976115 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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