The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
We know that young people are the future of society. They are the future leaders, entrepreneurs, athletes, scientists. Instilling them with the proper tools to ameliorate our society would be our prime responsibility. The prompt suggests that, instilling young people with the mindset of cooperation instead of competition is the way for them to create a better society. I mostly agree with the prompt as cooperation can have better outcome compared to having competition between them. I have two reasons as to why it is better to have cooperation, although I concede that having competition would improve a persons outcome because they have a rival to compare themselves with.
First of all, when a person incorporates cooperation in doing a particular task, they invoke a sense of friendliness with the other persons they are working with. For example, In school days, where each class has to present a project to the school. In this scenario a class working together in developing the project, each person in the class will get to know everyone's affinity and dislikes which help them form closer bonds with each other. This quality, when the student grows to be a leader or an institution, they know the benefits of working together and hence would form a more healthy environment instead of a hostile environment that can be caused due to competition.
Second of all, teaching children with sense of competition may instill them with invective behavior. For example, In a law firm, when a case comes across two junior partners and the one who does better in winning the case get to become a senior partner of the firm. In this case the person who is competing with the other would try many underhanded techniques to win the case and take credits to himself, because he was thought to be competitive. This in turn develops a bad relation between the persons and destroys the uniformity of the firm.
On the other hand, I would concede that competitive behavior can bring out the best in an individual as he has a measuring scale to compare himself with. For example: the child in a 100 meter race can improve himself by having a rival who can match his speed. This increases his speed and technique and overall increase his performance.
Hence I conclude by saying that, although it is good to have a competitive mind it is better to have a cooperative environment in an institution, for the institution to flourish in a positive way and reach better heights.
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- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position 50
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same curriculum until they enter college 66
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, second, so, still, as to, for example, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87885985748 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81510064968 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475059382423 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1508742364 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.111111111 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3888888889 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202078748424 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701215433624 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732269584557 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111373013879 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452490697912 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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