Send illegal immigrants to their own country.
The argument in the editorial column of the newspaper concludes that, the individuality of a country lies in the security of its borders, thus, efforts must be taken to send them to their own country. The author elucidates his claim by evidencing the illegal entry of immigrants, thereby leading to distruption of nation's economy and increa. The writer's contention is made on three unwarranted assumptions, which weakens the persuasiveness of his/her claim.
First of all, the author assumes that all illegal immigrants are threat to a country. This is a faulty assumption because, there might be cases of extreme violence in their own country, which gave them no option, but to seek accomodation in the neighbouring country. For instance, the illegal immigrants might belong to a minority community in their native country, recent political changes might have disrupted the harmony, and led to violent outbursts and injustice to the lesser privileged groups. In such cases, people have no other option, but to move to the nearby country, to escape violence and save their lives. Such people, who are in search for a safe place will not be a threat to a country, they are seeking shelter. In addition, there might also be cases of the country's own citizens, who are returning back, but lost their documents to prove their citizenship. Therefore, there might be numerous instances of harmless illegal immigrants, cornering them as threats and forcing them to leave the country is morally not right and based on inaccurate assumption.
Secondly, the writer assumes that accomodating illegal immgrants will compensate on the nation's economy. This is an incorrect asssumption and there are many instances proving that they can contribute to the nation's economy. For instance, if the government accepts illegal citizens into their country, and give them citizenship, they are forced to work to earn their bread, when they start earning, earning member has to pay their taxes, eventually contributing to the country's economy. In addition, there can also be exceptionally talented illegal immigrants, who are capable enough to set up unicorn (start-up companies that earn one billion revenue) companies in the country, within few years. If this is the case, the nation's G.D.P surges prominantly. Perhaps, the immigrants might have notary scientists. If this happens to be the case, they can contribute to scientific inventions and progress of the country, thereby bettering the nation's profit margin. Therefore, assuming that illegal immigrants hinder the economical progress of a country is fundamentally wrong and the contrast of them contributing to the country's development is no brainer.
In conclusion, the writer's recommendation of sending the illegal immigrants, back to their origin is based on inaccurate assumptions.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 447 350
No. of Characters: 2321 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.598 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.192 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.866 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 151 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.611 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.334 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.498 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: J
...he life of former Indian president, A.P.J Abdul Kalam, his first mission of sendi...
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Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: T
...ing my experience in working in a big I.T Information Technology company, I learn...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2281.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 440.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18409090909 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02946872985 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568181818182 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.518293793 60.3974514979 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.052631579 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1578947368 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16928207566 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447093656807 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395342243908 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106497049575 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349565794174 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 100.480337079 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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