With the development of science, technology and business in this day and age, it has become a core factor that makes people focus on it. Therefore, art has faded and is less attractive than before. In this essay, I will clarify reasons for it and give possible ways to boost art’s attraction.
There are multitudes of reasons why people nowadays pay more attention to aspects such as technology and business. Firstly, it is believed that art cannot help to find opportunities for well-paying jobs and stable jobs. For example, with singers and actors, if they are not famous, they cannot have as many shows as well-known people. Therefore, it will lead to an insecure salary and even unemployment. In contrast, science, technology and business are fields that offer good jobs such as engineers, researchers or executives and bring high salaries. Secondly, with the hectic schedule, people just concentrate on how to solve all the problems and tasks that chase them everyday. As a result, those things make them have to plug in work and gradually forget other things, including art.
I strongly suggest solutions that can change people’s views in art and bring attention to art. First of all, it is essential to have job orientations to let people know more about artistic jobs that have the same value as science, technology and business. In addition, various art subjects should be added to school and the time for studying arts should also increase. Thus, if children can understand art from a young age, they may feel values that art brings to life. Last but not least, the government needs to have policies which help to develop art such as encouraging artists to exhibit their artwork without paying a fee or opening more galleries so that people can visit them and feel relaxed for what art brings to them.
With the development of science, technology and business in this day and age, it has become a core factor that makes people focus on it. Therefore, art has faded and is less attractive than before. In this essay, I will clarify reasons for it and give possible ways to boost art’s attraction.
There are multitudes of reasons why people nowadays pay more attention to aspects such as technology and business. Firstly, it is believed that art cannot help to find opportunities for well-paying jobs and stable jobs. For example, with singers and actors, if they are not famous, they cannot have as many shows as well-known people. Therefore, it will lead to an insecure salary and even unemployment. In contrast, science, technology and business are fields that offer good jobs such as engineers, researchers or executives and bring high salaries. Secondly, with the hectic schedule, people just concentrate on how to solve all the problems and tasks that chase them everyday. As a result, those things make them have to plug in work and gradually forget other things, including art.
I strongly suggest solutions that can change people’s views in art and bring attention to art. First of all, it is essential to have job orientations to let people know more about artistic jobs that have the same value as science, technology and business. In addition, various art subjects should be added to school and the time for studying arts should also increase. Thus, if children can understand art from a young age, they may feel values that art brings to life. Last but not least, the government needs to have policies which help to develop art such as encouraging artists to exhibit their artwork without paying a fee or opening more galleries so that people can visit them and feel relaxed for what art brings to them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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...lly forget other things, including art. I strongly suggest solutions that can ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91883116883 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60211220754 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597402597403 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9525181596 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5333333333 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2666666667 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354131633607 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120572706053 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13325761675 0.0667982634062 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.333939320383 0.151304729494 221% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.28972139919 0.056905535591 509% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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