It is assumed that there is an increasing trend for famous individuals who may have negative influences on young people due to their glamour and richness without talents. From my perspective, I definitely agree with this point of view, and my reasons are as follows.
To begin with, it is assumed that the concept about idols of the youth is no longer within people who are renowned for their genius, but extends to individuals who have no ability, yet desire fame. These people tend to do anything to achieve their reputation through ludicrous behaviors such as hurting themselves or quarrelling with other people on social networks. According to these people, obtaining fame is the most important thing. As a result, following these influencers does not give any useful value, but also causes profound impacts on the young generation; because, they may have a tendency to imitate these wrong behaviors.
Nevertheless, idolizing individuals, who are rich thanks to inherited property from their parents or getting married to a wealthy person without truly hard working, might have negative influences on teen’s thoughts. For instance, there are some men and women, who always appear splendid looking in public, with the purpose of attracting and dating with a wealthy one, who may give them possessions and reputation. Consequently, this gradually sets a wrong example for the youth’s mind that they can achieve success easily without industrious working.
To sum up, I strongly believe that following these iconic people has some drawbacks on the future generation in terms of their thoughts and behaviors. Therefore, It is essential for adolescents to be wise enough to determine who is worth following.
It is assumed that there is an increasing trend for famous individuals who may have negative influences on young people due to their glamour and richness without talents. From my perspective, I definitely agree with this point of view and my reasons are as follows.
To begin with, it is assumed that the concept about idols of the youth is no longer within people who are renowned for their genius, but extends to individuals who have no ability, yet desire fame. These people tend to do anything to achieve their reputation through ludicrous behaviors such as hurting themselves or quarrelling with other people on social networks. According to these people, obtaining fame is the most important thing. As a result, following these influencers does not give any useful value, but also causes profound impacts on the young generation; because, they may have a tendency to imitate these wrong behaviors.
Nevertheless, idolizing individuals, who are rich thanks to inherited property from their parents or getting married to a wealthy person without truly hard working, might have negative influences on teen’s thoughts. For instance, there are some men and women, who always appear splendid looking in public, with the purpose of attracting and dating with a wealthy one, who may give them possessions and reputation. Consequently, this gradually sets a wrong example for the youth’s mind that they can achieve success easily without industrious working.
To sum up,I strongly believe that following these iconic people has some drawbacks on the future generation in terms of their thoughts and behaviors. Therefore, It is essential for adolescents to be wise enough to determine who is worth following.
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- It is assumed that there is an increasing trend for famous individuals who may have negative influences on young people due to their glamour and richness without talents From my perspective I definitely agree with this point of view and my reasons are as 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, look, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, for instance, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1467.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37362637363 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78211337638 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626373626374 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9437856192 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.363636364 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8181818182 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3636363636 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.479473185069 0.244688304435 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163447705793 0.084324248473 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.174837416354 0.0667982634062 262% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.326951008635 0.151304729494 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.313063019753 0.056905535591 550% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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