It is fact that teachers can thoroughly evaluate students’ academic performance through their involvement in their school assignments. On that ground, students are mandatory to work on their day-to-day school homework for different subjects. In this regard, when students are caught cheating on their homework, many people believe that they should be charged a penalty or teachers can punish them by making their coursework more difficult. On the other side, there is a group of people who contend that parents are the right choice who can make understand their children in this matter. Certainly, from my vantage point, the latter view contains more weight. For the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my stance.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that irrefutably children at this age are not enough matured to value money and when they are asked to pay the penalty in the form of money, apparently, it would not create any distinct difference in their daily habits. In fact, this decision might increase the load on parents’ heads. To shed more light on this I would like to reveal my real-life incidence. When I was in the fifth standard, a few of my batchmates were caught coping with their coursework, and thereby, the school has charged a big amount of penalty on them. Unfortunately, at that time they were laughing and feeling proud of themselves since they did not get punished directly. What is more that they thought it was just a small matter and they could keep continuing copying after paying of penalty. Ultimately, their attitude and way of thinking clearly showed that they did not regret what they had done wrong.
Another equally noteworthy reason is that giving the charge to parents is a judicious decision that school could take as parents are the ones who usually spend their whole day with their children. Hence, firstly they can softly make their children understand that they are at fault and explain to them the long-term consequences of performing these types of habits in the future. Furthermore, they can strictly watch on their children whenever they work on their class assignments. To exemplify, based on new statistics that have been collected from research at the University of California that 85% of children follow what their parents teach them. Similarly, if the same rule is applied when children get caught copying, parents can nudge them to stop their bad habits and encourage them to follow a good habit in their lives. Admittedly, no one can be the best than parents who can make their children feel their mistakes so children would stop behaving in certain ways.
To recapitulate, from contemplating all remarks, in spite of the fact that some people may not agree with my viewpoint, I strongly believe that parents can easily motivate their children and stop their bad habits. This is because parents are very close to them, and children do not easily listen to another’s voices.
- TOEFL T P O 21 Integrated Writing Task 52
- Which one of the following do you think is the best way to get to know a city in a limited amount of time when you first visit it Touring historic sites going to markets or shops eating in restaurants or spending time in cafes 3
- Traditions are defined as customary or established ways of doing things in a family community or culture Some people believe that it is important to follow traditions even when those traditions conflict with or are quite different from their own individua 90
- Traditions are defined as customary or established ways of doing things in a family community or culture Some people believe that it is important to follow traditions even when those traditions conflict with or are quite different from their own individua 88
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 90
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, similarly, so, in fact, in spite of, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2512.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03406813627 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62062956682 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5250501002 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0952833605 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.619047619 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7619047619 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04761904762 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219005338727 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705643656241 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602371370832 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134580531537 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0896987337966 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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