The increase in automation will lead to people losing their jobs

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The increase in automation will lead to people losing their jobs

For the past 20 years, technology has had a huge impact in our lives whether it’s positive or negative. One that is discussed by many is the increase in automation and whether it will lead people to lose their jobs. I strongly believe that the increase will lead people to lose their jobs. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.

Firstly, a machine is coded to make the outcome appear faster. Compared to a human, a machine works more efficiently and faster. A great example of this is when I worked as an intern in a dance school. My job was to check on student’s monthly fees, their class schedules and take notes when they didn’t show up to the classes. I worked there for six months but one day, they bought a computer system that can do all this work just with a click of a button. Since the machine did all the work I wasn’t needed anymore. For the sole reason of a computer doing work faster than me, I was unemployed. On top of this, since there will be machines working instead of humans, companies won’t have to pay salary for the employees. Doing yearly check up on machines is much more cheaper than having to pay thousands of employees salaries. To give an example, my friend worked at a clothing company where they sew all the clothes were handmade. Unfortunately, her boss decided to invest on machines that didn’t require human work since they were much cheaper to take care of in the long run. My friend and her fifty other colleagues were fired in less then wo months.

To sum it up, i believe that automation will lead to many people being unemployed. Automation is a genius investment for big companies but on the contrary of this, many peoples work lives are on risk simply because of some machines.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Suggestion: cheaper
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Suggestion: than
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, so, then, as to, i feel, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54037267081 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46117179692 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552795031056 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4958844765 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.2222222222 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8888888889 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250380186834 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946075971719 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.178530869371 0.0737576698707 242% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241786379163 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.175133529842 0.0645574589148 271% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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