A hidden bomb
It had been two days since the investigation of the hidden bomb planted in Shinjuku Train Station started. Wiping sweat off of his brow, the chief of the investigation case announced that no clues nor leads have been dug up in their findings. Sighs and scoffs spread throughout the room as the investigators recall the recent bombing of the local police department.
The connections between the two cases made the investigators assume it was the same culprit. Both gave five days to meet their impossible demands, yet the bombing of the department had been done on the fourth, the unsuspecting search party being caught in the explosion. One of the investigators, David, impatiently claimed, "There is no point in searching, we have to track the problem to its root". To which Rin, one of the survivors of the explosion, had suggested that deploying more people to find the bomb was the safer bet. There was a collective nod of agreement which signalled the end of the decision-making meeting.
On the way back, David noticed that the tensed worried face of Rin had retracted back to a calm, confident smile. When asked, Rin abruptly explains that it is because he truly believes that the case will be cracked. Yet, that doesn't stop David from thinking about the strange occurrence all night long. "Wasn't he one of the survivors of the search party?", he thought to himself, "Why would he suggest something that he knows will be futile?". The next day, he decided to pick apart the entire situation.
The next day brought no progress whatsoever. Another meeting was held, yet Rin's indifference contrasted with the tense atmosphere of the gathering didn't seem right to David. On the way back, his curiosity got the better of him and he recklessly decided to follow Rin to where he went. He crept behind Rin all the way till he reached his home. Outside, he decided to wait. After a few hours into midnight and almost dozing off a couple of times, he noticed a man in a tall black cloak striding off from the corner of his eyes. He walked in pursuit of the man. David followed the man till he was shocked by the realization that they were right beside the train station.
The mysterious man knelt down while pulling something out. With precision and shaky hands, the man had placed a clock-like object on a wall. This made David leap out of his cover and point the gun that he had luckily brought towards the man. The man's hands immediately went for, as David assumed, the bomb. He threatened to set off the bomb if David had not put down the gun. Yet David, in quick succession, shot the man's hand and inched closer to the scene. A sense of cold and guilt spread from his hands to his body as he realized who he had shot. Rin layed there, screaming in agony as a thought suddenly clicked to David. "This is why we couldn't find the bomb in our searches" he asked, "This is why Rin was the only man in the search party who was outside the police department when the explosion happened". In a blinding fit of fury, David pressed the trigger several times before the case was finally cracked.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 41.998997996 188% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2601.0 1615.20841683 161% => OK
No of words: 551.0 315.596192385 175% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72050816697 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.20363070211 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67213507555 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 176.041082164 166% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529945553539 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.9 506.74238477 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 16.0721442886 193% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5449609762 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.9032258065 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7741935484 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.709677419355 7.06120827912 10% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105073610793 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0307833071414 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656793198851 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0745849610672 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770692545545 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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