Celebrities like singers, movie stars, or influencers nowadays earn too much. Do you think they deserve what they earn? Explain your answer with relevant examples and/or explanations.
In my opinion, personalities these days are qualified to receive such a large sum of money from their hard work for the world.
To begin with, celebrities have devoted time and efforts to creating many spectacular works, which are significantly entertaining and inspiring. For instance, in the quarantine, many of us are worn out, abjectly exhausted as well as lifeless for not being allowed to go out of our house for several months, hence films and music become one of our recreational activities. It is said that they are a perfect cure for our boredom. Not only is a popular entertainment, but these works are also a strong motivation. The meaningful lesson hidden behind a song or a movie will touch our soul and powerfully incentivize us.
Moreover, many celebrities have used their fame to influence the world positively. Recently, the Korean band BTS have given a speech about the future for the young generation at the United Nations, to empower young people. Indeed, not only BTS but more personalities also want to change our world for the better. They have a speech toward the public about problems, such as climate crisis, poverty, pollution, etc. that beset the society. Therefore, they have raised the awareness of many people. Over and above, some celebrities have spent a large sum of what they earn to help the less fortunate, or donated to charitable organizations.
However, there’s still a group of celebrities who doesn’t deserve what they earn. Firstly, their works, which are complete nonsense, don’t reach any ethical standards of society as well not have any artistic value. The song “WAP” by rapper Cardi. B may be the best example of this. Secondly, many personalities use their fame to benefit themselves illegally. They deceive the public by holding a charity program then taking all the money away.
To sum up, only the personalities who contribute good value to the world are praised and be worthy of what they gain.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, for instance, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02140672783 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8006389359 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593272171254 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4013739021 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.35 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148862823642 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479338763696 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648878861971 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0768787425319 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491146805505 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.33 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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In my opinion, personalities these days ...
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...ey from their hard work for the world. To begin with, celebrities have devoted ...
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...ur soul and powerfully incentivize us. Moreover, many celebrities have used the...
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...r donated to charitable organizations. However, there’s still a group of celebr...
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...rogram then taking all the money away. To sum up, only the personalities who co...
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...aised and be worthy of what they gain.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, for instance, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02140672783 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8006389359 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593272171254 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4013739021 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.35 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148862823642 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479338763696 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648878861971 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0768787425319 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491146805505 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.33 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.