TPO44 Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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TPO44 Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related

Nowadays as many urban areas are becoming increasingly busy because of the fast development of the society. Many parents have too work and don't have a lot of time to spend with their children. So there is a discussion on the things parents should do with their children in the precious few times when they're not busy. I personally agree with the statement of spending time having fun playing sports or games together.

First, playing sports can relieve the tension of both parents and children. After a day or a week commuting and typing or talking with clients, parents should really have time doing sports to relax and have fun to rest for the next week. It's the same thing for students to. After a week of unstopping intake of knowledge and information or a day of numerous tests and pressure, they could wisely use their limited time with their mom and dad for some sports and outdoor exercise to regenerate and have fun with your dearest relatives. Take the example of mmy friend James. His parents are working in a bank in a different district. So they have to leave early in the morning to arrive on time and they always get home late at night. Also, they have to talk and provide service for twenty to ninety clients and costumers aday, which is a very energy consuming work. James have to goto school on every weekday and have many classes , which is also very tiring. However his parents only have a one day break every week on saturday. So they decided to have some high quality time with James. And on every Saturday, I could see and hear them having fun kicking a soccer ball or throwing a frizbi. So playing sports is a good way of spending quality tiime with children.

Second, playing sports together can create a more close relationship. Sports always involve competin, and through this fun and active process, parents and children could work together as a team or have a fierce competition as opponants. This way, they can have a tighter relationship and get to know each other better which can make up for the lost company in busy weekdays. For instance, My neighbor Fred goes to to a famous but high study pressure school. He always has tests which he sometimes gets bad scores. However, his parents are white collars and have a long work hour every day. So they arrive home only after Fred goes to sleep. So he often dosen't have encouragement when he gets home. But on weekends, his parents and him go swimming and compete to see who's the fastest, and by having fun with his parents, Fred feels energetic again and he loves his parents more and more. So, parents should spend their limited leisure time playing sports with their children.

In conclusion, based on the reasons above, named, relieveing tension and enhancing relationships, parents should play sports with childrenin limited leisure time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
...society. Many parents have too work and dont have a lot of time to spend with their ...
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...children in the precious few times when theyre not busy. I personally agree with the s...
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Suggestion: It's; It is
...and have fun to rest for the next week. Its the same thing for students to. After a...
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Suggestion: has
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Suggestion: However,
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... and him go swimming and compete to see whos the fastest, and by having fun with his...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 13.8261648746 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2338.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71370967742 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3874441308 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.4144430836 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7142857143 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78571428571 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397082659092 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113647083366 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0986262674065 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27211690234 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111038414687 0.0645574589148 172% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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