QUESTION FOR GIRLS
The fact that young people spend a lot of time in cultural activities such as music and theater is joyful and encouraging. However, the fact that young people should spend less time in sports is something I disagree with. In this essay, I will explain why.
In my opinion, it is very respectful that young people should spend a lot of time on art. Because there are many traditions of musical art that are lost, if not preserved and maintained, they will one day disappear. Cultural and art activities not only help maintain the national cultural identity but also help young people cultivate their knowledge of art. For example, when you spend time watching Cai luong, it will help you gain more knowledge about this type of theater and you can pass it on to the next generation. And there are many other benefits such as: developing intelligence, confidence, patience, enhancing creativity, and so on.
On the other hand, I do not agree with young people spending less time on sports than spending time on art, because without doing sports will lead to many health risks. When not practicing sports, the body will not be flexible, the organ systems are vulnerable. It even leads to an increased risk of heart disease, atherosclerosis, and stroke. Therefore, I suggest that young people should spend a lot of time in sports to avoid health problems.
In short, I disagree with the above opinion. Young people should balance both cultural and artistic activities and sports activities to be both knowledgeable and healthy.
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Sentence: Young people should balance both cultural and artistic activities and sports activities to be both knowledgeable and healthy.
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Sentence: For example, when you spend time watching Cai luong, it will help you gain more knowledge about this type of theater and you can pass it on to the next generation.
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