Without a shadow of a doubt, friends are of vital importance in every individual's life because they are the ones who help us in time of need. While some people believe that people should not change their living town because they are going to lose their old friends, others, however, stand on the other side of the continuum, asserting that it is significantly beneficial to move and see other parts of the world. As for my opinion, I subscribe to the latter idea. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two of my most prominent reasons for advocating this viewpoint.
First and foremost, the internet allows people to meet and interact with one another electronically. In other words, internet technology has brought people closer. As a result, people can still be in touch with their old friends through internet calls. With internet calls, they can still hang out with each other and have a delightful time. Therefore, moving to a new country or town doesn't mean that individuals are going to lose their previous friends. A personal example can drive this notion home. After I got accepted to university, I had to go to another city. At first, I was upset and afraid, but thanks to the internet, I was able to call my friends and family in my hometown whenever I missed them. This helped me to endure the adversities of living in a different city. In fact, I didn't even feel homesick. Through association with my friends and family members being meaningful to me, I achieved a sense of security, love, and companionship.
Furthermore, another equally compelling reason for corroborating my stance lies in the fact that going to a different city enables us to enlarge our circle of friends, thus establishing a well-connected interpersonal network. There is no denying that there are significant benefits to having a potent human resource. Better human resources, to some extent, mean more precocious opportunities for a job position, and even the possibility of carving out our own career. Therefore, moving to a new city and getting a chance to know more people, paves the way for success and these people are more likely to prosper in the future. Additionally, in this hectic modern era, our life is fulfilled with unavoidable problems to overcome. Our friends can help us to get through the vicissitudes of life. Hence, having a larger social circle makes our lives easier and more convenient.
To put it all in a nutshell, having all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I strongly believe that people should not stop going to a new place to live just because they think they're going to lose their friends. This is because they can be still in contact with their old friend through the internet, also this gives them a chance to get to know more people.
- Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cellphone online games and social networking websites 90
- TPO 60 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better to live in one town or city all your life than to move from one place to another Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 90
- TPO 64 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important to read or watch news presented by people whose views are different from your own than it is to read or watch news presented by those whose views are similar to your own Use 76
- TOEFL T P O 42 Integrated Writing Task 3
- Some parent offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...riends are of vital importance in every individuals life because they are the ones who help...
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Line 3, column 386, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...refore, moving to a new country or town doesnt mean that individuals are going to lose...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... living in a different city. In fact, I didnt even feel homesick. Through association...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...w place to live just because they think theyre going to lose their friends. This is be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, as for, in fact, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86163522013 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78381922819 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517819706499 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1043686109 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.625 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254247875618 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635005831686 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636709157773 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165702418652 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511141130304 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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