Since the dawn of humans, youths have been an important part of every society. There is no doubt that they’re the future of every country, and as intellectuals, it’s important to involve juveniles in important decisions that determine the future of their society. There has been no shortage of debates among individuals on whether nowadays, young people have any impact on the major decisions in societies. I vehemently cling to the notion that in contemporary society, juveniles do not contribute to their society as they used to. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two of my most prominent reason for advocating this viewpoint.
First and foremost, with the emergence of modern technology and the ever-increasing pace of its improvements, people, especially adolescents, became solitary. In other words, modern technology has drastically transformed the way we socialize with each other, and it caused a notable social withdrawal. To elucidate more, with the advent of social media and the internet, people lost their sense of empathy toward one another, and eventually, they saw their society as a cluster of people who obligatory live with each other. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. I remember when I was a child, my family and I used to gather around in my grandparent’s house to visit and socialize. As a result, we started to enhance our relationship and create bonds among ourselves. By having a good social life, young people start to see their society as a colossal family, and they start to take responsibility and undertake the burden of being a vital part of their society. But, the contemporary human, doesn’t have such a social relationship with other people and doesn’t care to tolerate such a heavyweight.
Furthermore, another equally compelling reason for corroborating my stance lies in the fact that in this hectic modern era, we don’t give any chance to youth to flourish and burgeon. To be more specific, we rather give big responsibilities to older people than young ones. We don’t trust them, whatsoever. How can we expect youthful to get involved in critical decisions of society, while we don’t give them any chance? For instance, you can’t find a single company in my country, which is being run by a young person, or a young politician in any party. Individuals must bear in mind that juveniles are the future generation, and they should be able to create their world how they want. Therefore, we should provide them a chance to shine and influence their society.
To put it all in a nutshell, having all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I strongly believe that adolescents don’t have much impact on their society, on the ground that modern technology has changed their social life, and they’ve lost their sense of sympathy toward other people, as well as we don’t give them any chance or responsibility.
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- TOEFL T P O 42 Integrated Writing Task 3
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, no doubt, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2488.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07755102041 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96049513515 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508163265306 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 785.7 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.5259739908 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.476190476 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167157602392 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516090847207 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403139385482 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107457791 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583623081468 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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