Your university is located in a community with a struggling economy. The school administration has decided to make it mandatory for each student to volunteer at least 40 hours per year to one of the town’s many volunteer programs. Do you agree or disagree with this policy?
The people we meet, the connections we make, and the work we do are essential parts of our life. Although some may argue that students should focus all their time on studying, I strongly agree with the policy. I believe it is an excellent idea to engage students in volunteering activities. My view is based on social and professional grounds, and in the subsequent paragraph, I will support my major reasons with examples.
To begin with, creating meaningful, fulfilling, and mutually beneficial connections within the community is useful for everybody involved. Moreover, recent scientific studies conducted by psychologists proved that it has a tremendous positive impact on mental health to connect with the community you live in. My personal experience demonstrates this concept. A few years back, I struggled with my mental health due to trauma from the past, so my sister suggested that it would be beneficial for me to distract myself by helping in a local dog shelter. As time passed, I established strong friendships with others working there, and because we spent a lot of time together, we shared and discussed our problems. Meaningful community engagement helped me to decrease the number of depressing feelings and, therefore, improved my health. It is possible that if this had not happened to me, I would have had a different attitude towards this policy.
From a professional standpoint, the current job market many times requires working experience, even for a junior or a starting position, and, hence, this can cause issues for young graduates to find job offers which suit their education. Therefore, any volunteering, mandatory or not, is a way to provide leverage for students' future job applications. To illustrate, in the second year of my studies, I volunteered as an astronomy teacher in a local planetarium for a group of children between seven and ten years old. I gained a lot of experience not just in teaching but also in managing a group of people, creating exciting activities, and working with funds allocated for the group. This experience helped me in my recent job interview; they were interested in my experience working in a team and managing coworkers with different backgrounds. If I had not accepted the teaching position, I would probably not have gotten the job I applied for.
In this essay, I discussed my personal beliefs that it is and splendid decision for students to volunteer in their community. I feel this way not just because it helps establish fruitful connections but also because it boosts the resume of young graduates.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, i feel, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2164.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09176470588 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99383079638 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550588235294 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7425827339 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.894736842 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3684210526 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151506052812 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488016558604 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357079596699 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0937597757115 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183226951866 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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